My first scanlation
Thanks to
hungryhobo for the TL script (https://forums.e-hentai.org/index.php?showtopic=233896&hl=)
ongokakashi for corrections
and
Google translate for additional translations

Page 21's text made no sense when I ran it through Google TL

Text cleaned soon
(Reupload cause of minor errors that I didn't notice)

Raw: https://e-hentai.org/g/1112866/4987a89c13/
Spanish TR: https://e-hentai.org/g/1134328/50395a09da/
Chinese TR: https://e-hentai.org/g/1232762/a9a5fd57f2/

Thanks for this translation! Wonderful boobs!!

Base +43, Dnkz +23, jsnormandy +10

Hey, great work with the typesetting, I appreciate the effort!

I tried getting the translation out there but many people considered secondary translations to be unacceptable or that it would tarnish the original meaning of the doujin. I feel atleast having an english translation better to not having one.

so thank you for picking this up!

Base +6, Dnkz +23, pulsar577 +9

Thanks for seeing this

Base +6

This was the digital version? The image quality is pretty bad.

Base +11

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The typesetting is not bad for a first one (we have seen much worse here) but it could use a bit of polishing.
Sometimes you leave short words alone on one line even if you don't have e.g. on page 6 bottom left panel let meI quote Bob Ross:"Everybody needs a friend").
If you have trouble fitting the text inside of bubbles or too many shorter words end up being alone on one line, reduce the overall fontsize a bit.
And differntiate between thought/narration by setting your font to italic or if you want to be real fancy choosing a different font.

Edit:
@Marome
Do you really want to know how bad typesetting/editing can get? Here are some examples I could remeber:
https://e-hentai.org/g/1549143/a9e0d25a01/
https://e-hentai.org/g/1610297/c784e4af92/
https://e-hentai.org/g/1005410/f4c1624183/

The best way to improve is reading typesetting guides like https://www.insidescanlation.com/etc/the-idiots-guide-to-editing-manga/guide/main
or look at the work of top class editors like mr.wayne, Mysael or the stuff from Redlantern and see what is differnt to your work and practice, practice, practice.

Last edited on 29 April 2020, 20:43.

Base +16, darkdepths +16, Dynellen +49, Megaton +45, m42a +16, Hilarity +6, Emote +6, jsnormandy +10

I see, thank you Ancient-Alien.

How bad can type setting get from here anyway?

Base +6