This is certainly the closest I've ever made to a full rewrite, as I usually try to restrict my editing hand quite rigorously (but I felt that in this case it was more than appropriate to make this version). I liked so many of the ideas in the original that I just really wanted to expand the dialog to flesh them out more, and I would say I was quite tired of looking at the original dry text. As usual no characters or major story arcs are altered, only minor details and sequencing (and I've added an additional page and some additional art).

Please enjoy, and save your hatred of rewrites for someone who cares.
Open to feedback on the writing/language usage in the comments.

Original english translation: https://e-hentai.org/g/1647368/07826ad4fe/

I dont see the issue, I genuinely love your versions of the translations, like you say, they keep the story the same you just change very minor things. And actually from what ive read I prefer your versions! So much in fact that im wondering if you take commissions or requests (maybe something i want translated with your style of writing, might match your tastes so you wouldnt mind doing it anyway!) do you have an email or discord? Just something I can use to message you? Keep up the great work!

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