This is the fixed version of my initial upload.

I've invested 12 hours into translating this because I like this doujin.
I've then invested an additional 8 hours into fixing the initial version (I was taken back by how fast the time went by as I was doing this, once I'd realized it was 4 o'clock and not half past 1 as I'd thought.

I've refreshed this gallery many times because I was given advice with which I agree on how to improve the overall quality of the publication. The latest revamp is the color mastering of the image files.

please expunge your previous post instead of spamming three different post.

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Project (final-fixed-final) (super final) (oh my god, now it's 100% final) (or not, but i hope now it is).psd

xD

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@nexxkinn

I did.
You've expunged it as well meaning that you've seen that I did it, making your comment spam.

@Med1um

Lets hope not..

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@Gandeloft: when you do changes, even if that means replacing all the files, the ideal thing is to edit the already existing gallery instead of creating a new one. This way, people won't download an outdated version by mistake.

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Raw: https://e-hentai.org/g/1686714/809eaa8a6b/
Text cleaned: https://e-hentai.org/g/1723855/2727b46a7e/

Thanks for fixing this up.

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@Floripes: Thanks on having a nice a approach. I'll use up the "I'm still new here" excuse right away 'cuz.. Well it's the truth. I'd not read the explanation on what cloning a gallery does and only had memorized the " images can therefore no longer be added, deleted or rearranged" after publishing a gallery rule. Gonna do better next time. :)

@DJNoni: My pleasure.

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Gandeloft you rock! I own this doujinshi and was planing on scanning it but now I don't need to. I do own a few other eva doujinshi so I will scan them when I got time.

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Wow, another shit post, another translashition

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天天你们就想操明日香，只有我喜欢绫波丽吗？

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I had some time to take a closer look at your work and it's not that bad as I originally thought. It's mostly the fonts that are your problem. Fonts can make or break a translation. With some comic fonts future works should look better. You should also consider reducing the fontsize for the dialog 2-4 steps and give your text more room to breath.

If you plan to continue to translate the SFX as well, take a look at this translation https://e-hentai.org/g/1711211/964b29883a/ and how it was done there. I found it really good.

And you should learn to level images. A how to instruction was in the guide I recommended yesterday ( https://www.insidescanlation.com/etc/the-idiots-guide-to-editing-manga/guide/main ).
With this you can turn images like this https://e-hentai.org/s/ac2fe5f40f/1317895-2 into something like that https://e-hentai.org/s/2979a828ee/1364239-2 .

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@Ancient-Alien: I have implemented "Image leveling". I didn't follow a guide, I just went at it by my preference. Thought it would be better to leave the images "unleveled" for the purpose of having the best possible preservation, but I know that I myself like the images to be "leveled" better than not, so I'd gone ahead and just did it by myself.

Regarding translating SFX, I'm pondering it. I like the clean look of the example you've provided a lot, but I also want to cover as little of the art as possible. With the way I've done it, I'd done just that, while with the way you're suggesting, alongside the original author's SFX text, the translated SFX text is also covering art which was otherwise not covered by anything. I'll see about it.

Reducing the font size to give my text more room to breathe.. I like how you've said it. I'll also experiment with it on the next project I'll undertake.

Thanks on the feedback.
Hopefully for the next time I'm going to have taken care of everything being as it should before I upload for the first time. I'll give myself a day or two to re-read everything on the next work I'll go through. A lot of the literal translations I did downed on me as not really being the best way to translate what they were the translations of only like, a day after I'd finished with the brunt of the work. Also, the user 葛の寺 helped me with some guidance on what the faultiest of my literal translations were.

Last edited on 03 September 2020, 09:13.

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God the expressions in this are AMAZING. The plugsuits were lovely to look at also...

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Bien bandant, mais je prefere Rei...

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Can anyone explain to me the mind control here?

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There is no mind control, someone added that tag incorrectly. Just downvote the tag.

Last edited on 27 May 2022, 04:42.

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Is this a fixed version? Lol.
R u blind or what? 14 page

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Yes this is the final version. Nothing's wrong on page 14.

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Asuka-chan is the cutest!

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