RAW:https://e-hentai.org/g/1638250/aebe787be4/

Typesetting and uploading for the first time
If the font is unclear or bad in some places
Please forgive me!

This is really not a very simple thing!
I have tried to do my best!

and...
I also uploaded content without text

1~15:text
16~30:no text

Updated the first (cover)
Change Japanese text to English text

How do I feel like I messed up something...

Base +12, hybrid235 -6

Next time, please read the bounty description : "You'll have the right to upload the gallery, I just want to check before you post it to be sure of the quality of your work.". You never sent me anything.
Also, "thanks" for not mentioning the translator anywhere, it would be more respectful to do so...

Above all, you should start by reading some guides, it will help you a lot since you're a beginner. This one could help you : https://e-hentai.org/g/274869/052c6b9d43/

Another recommendation would be to upload different galleries for the textless and the English version. Maybe turn this one into a full textless one and keep the English upload for the V2.

Base +9, suratkabar +11, Bazookaham +13, Xalren525 +6, waifu_wanderer +6, Vilis +26, hybrid235 +6, Cadavrus +6, The Inker -8, bigscuba +6, tracesnull +9, CPR +6, Bobirons -6

Well... It's good that you didn't commit the usual rookie mistake of 'using the resampled gallery instead of using the full quality gallery'.
However, like mariesmns said, it would be good for you to read some guides (or even check works from other editors in order to see what they do / what work and what doesn't). Or you can even ask people on the forum to give you some tips in order to improve your editing/typesetting.

Well, guess I will just do that and hope that those little advices will help you:
- Center text is your friend.
- Fonts. I believe you should try to find better fonts than those. A few example: laCartoonerie (for normal dialogue), augie (for shy characters), Shoganai (sfx), Mango (sfx but this font is quite difficult to find), Felt (yelling), ...etc.
- Reduce the space between each lines. No need to leave that much space.
- DO NOT DEFORM THE FONT. At least most fonts are weak to this... and it gives only an ugly result. If you want to put the text in the bubble, "deforming the font" is the very last option you should ever consider. Instead of doing this, you can: Reduce the size of the text or put some words on another lines or cut off a big word into two parts (don't forget to add the "-"). There are a few more options but what I already mentionned should work most of the time

Base +15, waifu_wanderer +6, Vilis +26, hybrid235 +6, bigscuba +6, Bobirons -6

@asg5520
>How do I feel like I messed up something....
It's pretty easy especially when doing things for the first time. One way to start out editing is to read the editing FAQ and the editing thread in the Cove of Scanlators forum at:
https://forums.e-hentai.org/index.php?showforum=81

Base +22