Justification for "poor grammar" tag (at least 10 mistakes):
- Sentences should start with a capital letter and end with a "."., "!", or "?". This rule is violated everywhere, but I'm only counting it once. I'm not even going to bother with commas. (+1) - p9: "I have idea" - missing "an" before "idea". (+1) - p9: "Noelle san, if you didn't join me. I'll tell the whole squad what you did early~" - "didn't" should be "don't", there should be a comma after "me" (not a period in the middle of the sentence), "early" doesn't fit (maybe "earlier"?). (+3) - p10: "what with the smerk!!?" - missing "is" after "what", should be "smirk". (+2) - p10: "for your information I do this because you blackmailed me... there no way I ever do it with this bakasta!!" - should be progressive tense ("I'm doing this"), missing "is" after "there", missing "would" after "I". (+2) - p10: "it amazing right?" - missing "is" after "it". (+1) - p10: "you sweating a lot Noelle san." - missing "are" after "you". (+1) - p11: "you sweating so much Noelle san." - missing "are" after "you". (+1) - p11: "it so erotic" - missing "is" after "it". (+1) - p11: "asta dick is getting smaller" - should be "asta's". (+1) - p11: "it so big." - missing "is" after "it". (+1) - p18: "look like you ready" - should be "looks", missing "are" after "you". (+2)