I'm always happy to see another Nightmare Express work translated, but this one could really use some proofreading.

Here's a list of corrections for the first eleven pages, in case someone decides to rework the text. I can check the rest if anyone's interested.

P03
"This event took place during the Showa era in a certain new residential area" is a better way of phrasing the first text box.
"Has lost its spark" is the correct idiom.

P05
"Vehicle", not "car".
"Imprisoned", not "detained".
"Was running into the wife a miscalculation on Tetsuo's part?" is a better way of rephrasing the last text box.

P06
"Confessed to", not "confesed".
"At your company", not "behind the company".
"Involve the police", not "involve police".
"Scandals", not "scandal", in keeping with the previous plural form.
"Cursed", not "cursesd".
"I'm giving you three more days. Discuss it with the higher-ups", not "I'm giving 3 more days. Discuss with the higher-ups".

P07
"Her husband Seiichi, his head covered with a bag, listens to her desperate screams", not "Husband Seiichi coverd with a covered bag, listens her desparate scream".

P08
"Stripped off her clothes", not "stripped her clothes".

P09
"Look on your face", not "look in your face".
"You've had no sex for the last six months of your married life" is a better way of phrasing the bubble on the second panel.
"You must have a lot of pent-up frustration" is a better turn of phrase.

P10
"Let your husband listen to how another man is fucking you crazy" or "Let your husband hear how", not "Lets your husband listens that another man is fucking you crazy".
"Was left to imagine what was happening" or "what was happening was left to her husband's imagination", not "was just left to imagination of what's happening".

P11
"It feels so good", not "It's feels so good".
"Pregnant", not "pregenet".

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