Keren bang

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Please get an English speaker to proofread, the eh forums are a great place to find them.
A bad translation is SIGNIFICANTLY worse than no translation.If no one works on it for a long time, like literally over a year, sure, maybe then someone unqualified could do it since no one else will... But that's really only okay for doujins since there's hardly any plot anyway.
The issue with bad translations is that the vast majority of the time no one is going to upload a better version, thus the doujin is stuck like this forever.

p4 "invite me to her party"
"unfortunately they're all stranger"
p5 "why you're here?"
"why don't you take a sit"
p6 "why showed up out of the blue?"
"I'm worried because you suddenly abandon the party"
"moreover, you implying I look like a child"
p9 "you always after my breast"
"because I love your breast saren chan"
p10 "if someone see you right now"

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You mentioned in the TL afterword that you're not a native English (I assume) or Japanese speaker. In that case, you really need to find someone to proofread your work, as mentioned above.

Here's a proofread version of the first ten pages that you might find useful. Go ahead and use it if you plan on correcting this gallery:

P04
"Invited me to her party", not "invite me to her party".
"They're all strangers", not "they're all stranger".

P05
"Why are you here", not "Why you're here".
"Why don't you take a seat", not "Why don't you take a sit".

P06
"Why did you show up out of the blue", not "Why showed up out of the blue".
"Because you suddenly abandoned the party" or better yet "left the party", not "because you suddenly abandon the party".
"The food doesn't suit your taste", not "the food doesn't suit with your taste".
"I'm not like you", not "I'm not you".
"You're implying that I look like a child", not "you implying that I look like a child".

P08
"Kissing me while I'm eating bread" or simply "Kissing me while I'm eating", not "Kissing me while I ate my bread".
"That's underhanded, you know" or "That's not fair, you know" might be a better phrase than "It's a foul you know".
"It's because you're so cute", not "Its because you're so cute".
"I couldn't help myself", not "I can't help myself" because he's speaking about a past action.

P09
"You're always after my breast" or "You always go for my breast", not "You always after my breast".
"Why did you stop, Yuuki", not "Why stop Yuuki".
"No can do" or "That won't do", not "No can't do".

P10
"If someone were to see us right now", not "If someone see you right now".
"I wouldn't know what to do", not "I don't know what to do".
"Everyone's busy with the party", not "Everyone busy with party".
"Is it that you don't want to do it with me" or "Do you not want to do it with me", not "You don't want to do it with me".

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Is that Rice Shower on the top right panel in page 5?

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