Fixed version, Sorry for the mistakes.

Page 21, Wont save. Photopea is messing up.

You can update your galleries, there's no need to create a new one every time.

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And you removed your name tag from other gallery and you put fixed instead xD
Why not put name like original one?

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The plot is pretty dumb, even by hentai standards.

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Blank bubble in page 21.

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If you want to replace a gallery
1. Go to My Galleries
2. Click Manage on the gallery that you wanted to update
3. Click the Clone and Unlock button
4. Upload any updates
5. Publish as usual

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If you do not understand the source language and do not have a firm grasp on the target language, do not "translate" things. You are helping absolutely no one and your work provides zero value to anyone.

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This is a rather odd NTR. So did Yuki like Kato or the other guy? They were all childhood friends and she changed her tune really fast. Is this NTR or Netori?

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