どうかしら? この下着、貴方のために買ってみたのだけれど…まあ、こんなにオチ○ポはち切れんばかりに勃起させてくれるなんて、本当にうれしいわ。あん、すごくおいしい。長くて太くて大きなオチ○ポ…60過ぎてこんなに若くて逞しいオチ○ポに愛されるなんて、ホント幸せ。あら、もうイっちゃいそうなの? あたしのお口でそんなにカンジてくれるのはうれしいけど、でもまだダメよ…そうね、じゃあちょっとしたクールダウンに、今度はあたしがしてもらおうかしら…

Thanks for the translations Kurokagehen

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>Kurokagehen
>inb4 its another rewrite lol

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dear diary, today I questioned about how can someone fap to this
only to google and find out GILF and Gerontophilia exist IRL

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Not a rewrite. Thank you!

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It is hentai not real, but this is not a Grandma, just a MILF with more wrinkles in the face.

People think this is wild but this is not even 25% of the way into GILF degeneracy.
Now that we think about it, next to nobody in hentai does anything close to a real GILF. Proof that there are still some standards.

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Love the way this guy draws lingerie.

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@Larequirem we do have someone IRL who had that fetish. His name is Chris-chan.

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Another day, another post by me. I went through the entire thing. You didn’t make random shit up in EVERY sentence... so that’s a start. I know for a fact that you didn’t improve because you were shitting out rewrites as early as YESTERDAY, but oh well.

The translation itself is incredibly stiff and there’s many omissions/liberties, but nothing I’d want to kill myself over. I’m not sure if I should chalk that up to you being a self-admitted ESL or something else, but whatever. I’m going to list the most egregious flaws.

p.8: “Such a young man is licking my pussy at this age, it’s unbelievable...” Mhyeah, this doesn’t sound human, but ok. Here’s what she actually says: “To think I’d get a young man such as you to eat my pussy with such fervor/so passionately at my age...”

p.9: 逞しい doesn’t mean fat, so not sure why you keep translating it like that. Sure, it sounds fine... but you could just use the wide array of accurate words for it: burly, sturdy, strong, etc.

p.12: “Such a granny like me is making love to a young guy like you...” This barely sounds English, or human. “To think such an old woman like me would be made love to so roughly by a fine, young man such as you...” I’ll agree the author is repetitive as fuck, but let’s respect his intent.

p.13: More omissions, yay. “Your vigorous semen is filling granny’s pussy.” How does that sound even remotely acceptable lol? “Your fresh/lively, youthful cum is flooding my granny/old-ass/decrepit pussy...”

p.14: Again, really awkward. It sounds off, even if the translation is “accurate”. A translator’s job is to TRANSLATE the meaning of a sentence into something that is both accurate and NATURAL in the target language. “I’m very happy that you show so much excitement for my mature body, even though I’m so much older than your mother.” Nobody talks like that. This is so mechanical. It’s not hot, either. “I’m so happy you’re this horny for [excited about] the body of a woman far older than your [own] mother...”

p.17: Okay, Mr. Robotto. “The pleasure of anal sex is not as good, as from a normal one, but instead I felt like I was dominated by a man, it’s just amazing.” DeepL gave up on that one, huh? Here’s what that slut says: “Anal sex doesn’t quite feel as good as getting my pussy stuffed [as pussy sex], but in return the feeling of being dominated by a man is out of this world [feels amazing].”

P.19: It’s okay to take liberties, but you took too many here. “Oh, young man, doing it 5 times in a row with a granny like me...” It’s more: “Sheesh, to think you’d cum as many as 5 times for such an old woman like me [as your partner]...”

There’s more, less bad mistakes, but this is so fucking draining, so I’m done.

A solid 5/10, and I’m being VERY generous. This is a failing grade where I live, but it’s better than the 1 you were doing before. I’m not sure why you insist on shitting out these “translations” instead of improving your English and Japanese literacy levels, b-... OH WAIT, I do know. Money. Why anyone would throw their cash at you is beyond me, but what can ya do. Now please, stop posting until you get better.

EDIT: Obviously, this is aimed the translator, not the uploader. Just wanted to make that clear.

@FireSempaii Just shoot me a DM on the forums.

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@cutegyary what's your info so I can contact you?

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Error in the title IMO, 60代 doesn't mean she's 60 years old but that she was born in the Sixties, so she's a little younger than that.

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The ending was surprisingly hot.

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@JukanX:

that means she could be born in 1960
which 2021-1960 = 61 years

so either way (as U60 or 1960 generation) she can be 60 years old.

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Maybe this
https://e-hentai.org/g/2339223/a446d8eacd/

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撸的一滴也没有了 老女人我真的射爆

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