I was actually the one to translate this! It's my first translation so any advice would be greatly appreciated! I'm also looking to do more translation so please take a look at the last page or message me on discord at Oni Fucker#7002

This is a translation of the original post at https://e-hentai.org/g/1974339/a780349d11/

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I can't judge the quality of your translation but if you want to do commissions there are a few things besides your japanese skills that need some polishing.

First start by using the full resolution images for editing instead of e-hentai's downscaled 1280px horizontal res images.

You can download the original resolution images via one of the following methods:
0. Stay away from aggregator sites like nh as they normaly just copy the reduced 1280px resolution images from this site.
1. Torrent Download (if available; WARNING torrents not always contain the latest or the full res version of a gallery. Downscaled torrents normally have 1280x in their names)
2. Archive Download (click on "Archive Download" and "Download Original Archive"; e-hentai account and some GP or Credits required)
3. The "Download Original" link at the bottom of each individual image (if there is noch such link the image on your screen and the original are identical)

And your typesetting skills could use some polishing as well. It's not completely bad but also not good either. So maybe you should read a guide or two like:

https://www.insidescanlation.com/etc/the-idiots-guide-to-editing-manga/guide/main
http://www.ruinevil.com/rawr/editguide/index.html
https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/

Edit:
1. Add punctuation. You may not need it in japanese mangas for whatever reason but you do in the Tls for western languages. And it's also an opportunity to seperate yourself from some lazy asses.

2. Try to avoid vertical text as much as you can but not at all costs. Very tall and thin bubbles sometimes leave you no other choice and there are very rare occasions (mostly screams and moans) where vertical text looks better. But that mostly means you have to deal with a long thin bubble and you're using bold fonts like Badaboom or Yikes.

3. Fontsize and shaping the text. Try to find a fontsize for standard text that works for most of the bubbles and use it consistent through the entire work whenever possible. Only increase or reduce fontsize when the author did. If you have trouble fitting the text inside a bubble reducing the fontsize is of course allowed. Example your Page 2 in the five bubbles in the upper half it seems you used three different sizes while in the RAWs it's only one size.
Reducing the fontsize 2-4 steps from the biggest you used probably would have helped to shape the text better. What leads to the next point: shaping the text. As a rough rule of thumb try to shape your text in an oval following the shape of the bubble. Here also applies not at all costs, avoid unnecessary hyphenation, it won't work for every bubble.
"Give your text room to breath" is a good advice from Anonblack's typesetting guide (unfortunately it's down) that you should keep in your head while finding a fontsize.

That's the points for improvement that came to my mind.
By the way, typo on gallery page 2 top left final word.

Last edited on 07 September 2021, 18:57.

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Thank you for the feedback! I actually didn't know that the images were downscaled so in the future I'll for sure try my best to find the original resolution! Also I did actually use the first link you posted for learning how to typesetting, with it being my first attempt I'm sure there is a lot more I can learn from it. Outside of doing things like replacing SFX and redrawing was there anything specific to the typesetting that you think could be improved so I have something to focus on?

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