Language:English

...why is the first page for ants?

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P3
"For the last few month I have been dreaming of the day Mr. Gallow and I..." Awkward phrasing; consider changing it.
"I have tried many thing..." > "I have tried many things..."

P4
"I choose this..." Observe proper usage of the verb tenses.
"It reaching..." Holy shit. At one point you were using the correct contraction of "it is", now you don't use it in this instance.

P5
"It hitting,,," Holy shit. At one point you were using the correct contraction of "it is", now you don't use it in this instance x2.
"I turn the switch on!!!" Observe proper usage of the verb tenses.

P6
"I caught a nice wild boar today." Awkward phrasing; consider changing it.
"Today sure went by fast." Someone please check this against its Japanese text. Methinks this is a product of MTL/poor TL.

P7
"I haven't take a shower..." > OBSERVE PROPER USAGE OF THE VERB TENSES.

P9
"One of the towel... is in an unusual place." Ok what?

P11
"That... I'm very happy that you invite me like that." So many "that" in one sentence. Awkward phrasing; consider changing it.
"Gallow thing..." You talking about Gallow's dick or another "something" that is also Gallow???

P12
'It's hurt..." So if I expand this it would say "It is hurt"? o.O

P13
"It so stiff and big!" Holy shit. At one point you were using the correct contraction of "it is", now you don't use it in this instance x3.

P14
"... it's felts..." IT'S FELTS?
"It's feels really good. IT'S FEELS???

P15
"Your vagina;.. it so tight..." Goddamnit.
"Gallow feels good in my vagina." Awkward phrasing; consider changing it. Feels like I'm talking to a wall here.
"If this keep up..." > If this keeps up...

P16
"My vagina... it getting full..." WTF IS YOUR PROBLEM WITH "IT" AND "IT'S"???

P17
"Garrow..." You even trying at this point? Is this a new character in the story?

Last edited on 11 September 2021, 19:13.

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P1
You named her Sara there but for the rest of the work it's Sera

P4
Bottom left untranslated dialog

And congratulations you also joined the club of *censored* who obviously don't know how to download full res RAWs from e-hentai. The resolution of your images (except for the ant size first one) is 1280x1807px while the original is 1360x1920px.

So that you can at least fix this of your many problems, here are the ways how to download full res images from this site:

0. Stay away from aggregator sites like nh as they normaly just copy the reduced 1280px resolution images from this site.
1. Torrent Download (if available; WARNING torrents not always contain the latest or the full res version of a gallery. Downscaled torrents normally have 1280x in their names)
2. Archive Download (click on "Archive Download" and "Download Original Archive"; e-hentai account and some GP or Credits required)
3. The "Download Original" link at the bottom of each individual image (if there is noch such link the image on your screen and the original are identical)

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sweet vanilla lovey dovey newlywed story
with lots of cute children ending
HNNNGGGGG

RAW:https://e-hentai.org/s/ceb68e5ff3/1970597-175

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Jesus the translated title doesn't even make sense. 岩龍人 translates to something like "Rock Dragonkin", 狐娘 means "Fox girl". How the fuck do you make it into "Newlywed life of Iwaryuji Daughter"

@PsychicDoom yep, checked the raw. Pg 6 should be something along the line of "You came home early today" instead of what bullshit this guy pasted in.

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remove that furry tag, I dont see furry here. Furry no, Kemonomimi yes!!!

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