Raw:https://e-hentai.org/g/2009951/ee6eba7bfd/

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Why the fuck is the text left aligned?!

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@SCSS Because this gallery is a case study on how many things you can fuck up in a 4 pages of fan translation. Can you find all fuckups? There's a prize if you do! The prize is DISAPPOINTMENT.

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I didn't see it the first time, but at a casual glance it seems like it's improved significantly with this new re-upload, aside from not being leveled and leaving alone sfx/moaning bubbles, which at least don't make it unreadable. As for the font, most people would view something like Wild Words as a better one. If you do any more editing, you can try Googling and downloading a couple of fonts that people commonly use for conversation and other types of bubbles, and doing a basic level with Photoshop/GIMP to turn the greys white. You can use a resource like https://www.muri.se/misc/soundfx.html to try to look up some of the in-bubble sound effects, which are mostly on p2. Also you missed a bubble on page 3, and not translating the title (which has key context in it) on p1 is a big omission. I'm not the best editor myself, but this is what I noticed. P.S. If it turns out you can't read kana/kanji without OCR and that's why you only translated some things, you should translate something with a more simple style next time.

Base +10, TCJJ +6

I disown this, not proud of it.

Last edited on 20 November 2021, 21:39.

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