raw: https://e-hentai.org/g/1003226/8c2478b3be/

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Base +6, sleazeball +4, Multimatter +6, tsuza +8, MetalGarv +14, Jago Smith +8, Helioxis -6, velocity606 +6, sgc_geh +9, SnowballDrone +6, irizu +6, Darudado +6, MisterLemon +13, and 12 more...

Seems OK to me, what's wrong with it?

Base +6, sgc_geh -9, MisterLemon -13, ra12 -6, kamikamyu -7, gotobedquentin -6, Chunga -18, luizsan -7, betaman156 -6, cutegyaru -13, Guardsman40k -7, Samproidzz -9

"Get these preys"
"they won't be enough for killing time"
"Nee-san too, take him as your opponent"
"Birth of this white soft skin"
"I want to counter attack on humans"

just to point out some, very awkward translation.

Base +6, velocity606 +6, nubtales12345 +6, sgc_geh +9, Refon_S +10, SnowballDrone +6, MisterLemon +13, JFK_360_Noscope +14, Braltewrakcus +10, cutegyaru +13, RefinedFapper +6, Guardsman40k +7, RubyRoy +4

Page 19 "I have the joy of seeint it without you knowing." Seeint is not a word.

Base +6, DarkMel +8, cutegyaru +13, Guardsman40k +7

Rough grammar:
p5: periods day -> period days
p5: every secrets -> every secret
p5: I had my periods two times -> I've had two periods/I've had my period twice
p5: myslef -> myself
p6: woman body -> womans body
p8: byes -> yes
p8: artifact spirit -> artifacs spirits
p9: We choosed -> We choose
p10: being rape -> being raped
p10: to be use -> to be used
p13: a woman body -> a womans body
p13: use like -> used like
p17: its tight -> it's tight
p18: everyhing -> everything

Base +42, Glovelove. +19, RubyRoy +4