I understand you wanted to distinguish the voices and use a more effeminate font, but I agree that a cleaner and more legible font would be better. Otherwise, thank you!
Thanks, but please punctuate. I know JP versions rarely do, but in English you HAVE to put periods at the of your sentences and commas where necessary.
On typesetting, here's some useful resources: https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/