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[Orphen] Zelda got stuck! (The Legend of Zelda)

Western
Posted:2021-12-28 04:44
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Language:English  
File Size:11.55 MiB
Length:10 pages
Favorited:542 times
Rating:
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Average: 4.25

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Posted on 28 December 2021, 04:44 by:   Pokom    PM
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https://www.pixiv.net/artworks/95083586
Posted on 28 December 2021, 04:52 by:   Vodhr    PM
Score +61
Can this dude decide if you are supposed to read from left to right, or right to left... -.-
Posted on 28 December 2021, 05:05 by:   Hunter2045    PM
Score +48
Not sure. But right to left seems to flow better.
Posted on 28 December 2021, 05:52 by:   Vodhr    PM
Score +12
@hunter2045
Yea, that is the "better" flowing way to do it.
I think this artist would do well with maybe including some better transitional panels, to better indicate how previous panels lead up to the next.

Because the dialogue on the first half of page 1 that made me confused on weather he wanted it read one way or the other.
The way it was read and structured, it would seem that her clothes got ripped which urged her to tell the person of. Suggesting to read from left to right.
However it seems it was inteded to be read right to left, it seems more to suggest someone came up behind her pressing his "bulge" into her ass. An additional panel her displaying this would help the flow, and relate better to her telling someone of before we as the reader has seen him do anything wrong.

On another ponit of how "disheveled" it feels; at the bottom panels on page 4, she goes from yelling, to sucking Links dick to THEN acknowledging that Link is there. XD
Mind you, it isn't bad that she sucks his dick before telling him "Hi" in porn terms. Just need a better transition.
It would however flow better if on the previous panels there were hands included - or better yet, another panel - that would imply someone is grabbing, and forcing her head to suck their dick, and when she goes for air notice that it is Link.

By far not the worst flow I have seen. But some of the suggested extra panels or details would greatly help it feel more like a continuous chain of events. :)
Posted on 28 December 2021, 06:14 by:   Chilean_Guy    PM
Score +33
What are you doing step-link?

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