Translator and Editor
donrandom

Editor Note:

This is all of the chapters I've translated so far. Going forward, I'll just update this gallery with new chapters.

I've completely redone chapter 1 and 2's translations/ typesetting with how I did 3 and 4.
I also went back and corrected some grammatical errors/ names. Most notably is how Testuya is Sousuke's cousin,
but Sousuke refers to him as "Nii-san," not "Cousin" like I originally did.

My original translations were just using MTL's. But I took Chinese for about 6 years as a secondary
language. I'm not fluent, but I'm no longer only relying on on the MTL for translating this series.

@shadowfairy provided a very detailed plot summary of each chapter and every character's
names as well. So these translations are a combination of my own Chinese translations,
Japanese machine translations, using @shadowfairy's summary, and editing it all together.

I'll keep this listed as a MTL, But please feel free to let me know how my editing and translations are.

Raw Chapter 1: https://e-hentai.org/s/c5937866af/2066139-1
Raw Chapter 2: https://e-hentai.org/s/bae82fd872/2066139-26
Raw Chapter 3: https://e-hentai.org/s/846c7644c1/2066139-51
Raw Chapter 4: https://e-hentai.org/s/5b3040b90f/2066139-76

who is the new girl

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Your editing was great, it's spot on, great job.

For translation, i cannot give that much opinion, but from the first dialog page, there are some point like in raw "ここだ" mean "it's here" but you put "i'm here on time" and that "buzz~" when in raw its "yes~"(its not a sound of the bell, but it's the wife voices) and also like unfinished word "兄さん、久しぶ…" mean "nii-san, its been a whi..."(being cut off) and you put finished word "nii-san, its been a while..." etc. so its gonna be the same suggestion from the last time, group up with proper translator.(or you could learn japanese and aim for minimum N3)

Thank you.

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@asurast
Thanks for the feedback again. I will look into grouping up with a proper translator at some point for this series. (A bit strapped for funds atm because I commissioned the translation of another series.)

Thanks for pointing out the "yes~," That was an oversight on my part because it was in colored text.

I can comment on the translations for "I'm here" and "It's been a while line" though. I did "I'm here on time." because I was looking at the panel, and It was weird to me for him to just say "I'm here" when looking at his phone with the time on it. The "It's been a while..." line, I didn't know it cut off, the Chinese characters used are "很久" which just means "long time." So that, combined with the MTL, is the reason why I didn't think to cut it off.

Last edited on 18 January 2022, 17:10.

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@donrandom
your editing has improved by a lot, i bet some group would like to have you on their team or you could try asking someone that might have interest in this series just like you (so you dont have to use your own funds).

Even if the panel says other thing, you might want to translate the dialog literally. "It's here" on the dialog was indication about the MC confirming to himself that it was the correct location that he seek(just like how a person act when trying to get to some places for the first time), so its better in here to translate it as it is even if the panel show phone and clock which also indicate that the MC checking the time. Also it's better to also use original JP raw as your point of references as well.

at any rate, good luck. You might want to use those dedication on this series to learn japanese so that you read and translate it yourself.

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Inseki must always be accompanied by incest. It's in the wiki.

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lol this plot progression is basically a pornwha, cant compain tho

cheers

p.s. i doubt mion is actually tetsuya's child

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