I wasn't even planning on translating this...I thought I wouldn't be able to do this doujin the justice it deserves. I guess I'll let you guys be the judge of that.

Edit: @cutegyaru No worries man, I only translate doujins for my own joy because I’m learning Japanese & wanted to apply it some way or another. So with that said, my main focus is mainly the accuracy of the translations, of course re-drawing is important but I’m no pro so it is what it is.

Thank you for hard work!

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>I thought I wouldn't be able to do this doujin the justice it deserves

Well, you kind of didn't. This is some extremely sloppy redrawing and cleaning. I know I've linked these resources to you before, and I encourage you to look at them before taking on some of the most difficult redrawing jobs out there (colored manga).

Also, your typesetting needs a lot of work. You don't even center your text correctly. Your translation is extremely awkward.

General: https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/
Typesetting: https://web.archive.org/web/20190406011154/https://fallensyndicate.wordpress.com/typesetting-tutorial/
Redrawing: https://web.archive.org/web/20150421210157/http://www.redhawkscans.com/showthread.php?7057-Rain-s-Redraw-Tutorials
Basic cleaning: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PANrCwHy630

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This kind of comment section is something I wish we could see more of. The criticism is constructive and the OP is understanding of their own shortcomings. Bless ya pervs, keep on keepin' on.

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Well, that's surprisingly wholesome. Pages 5 and 6 are literally sex under the bedsheets with the lights out for the purpose of procreation between a married couple.

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Brother, at least try to use the magic wand tool & modify >> expand selection/feather as needed to limit your area of work for cleaning.
At this point, it's like you're trying to paint the spice rack and ended up doing the neighbor's house too...

You can also cheat out a lil' bit by increasing the outline stroke sizes & fonts' leading to break the line focus fwiw

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Straight up couple wife and husband just having sex, really ? It's that even possible ?

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Art is really cool but the fact that there is a freshwater fish in a salt water tank and big betta and neon tetra 👁👄👁

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>multiple betta fighting fish in the same tank
immersion broken

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To be fair, it could be a freshwater tank with fake coral. Can't excuse the multiple male bettas, though.

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Even though they said they would stop trying for a while, I bet she already got pregnant in the end, that would be a wholesome twist wouldn't it?

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Page 22: Drawing mistake. Her wedding ring switched hand in the bottom panel.
Page 13: Even worse drawing mistake. Her wedding ring is on 2 different hands in the same page.

Last edited on 20 January 2024, 23:07.

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