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Pretty sloppy English right from Page 1. "Why those two are having sex?" "No, that impossible" "Is we actually seen by someone?"

Base +13, GeniusDuck +6, Lao Shan Long +7, PinguPrin +7

There's a lot of grammatical errors just in the first couple pages. it's not completely unreadable but it's really goddamn funny.

pg. 3 "why those two are having sex?"
incorrect word order, should be "why are those two having sex"

pg. 3 "why they do it normally in a place like this"
wrong tense, should be "why are they doing it in a place like this?"

pg. 4 "no way, is we actually seen by someone?"
shieeeeeet, wrong tense yo. "no way, were we actually seen by someone?"

pg. 5 "no way, why am became this horny?"
wrong tense, should be "why have I become this horny?" or maybe "why am I becoming so horny?"

there's a ton more but I don't want to write an essay. Just review and proof read some more before you upload. Tense seems to be your biggest issue, followed by word order.

Base +6, ajarlube +6, Gentleman Chimera +8, GeniusDuck +6, Lao Shan Long +7, PinguPrin +7

Here are a few more errors so this can get the rough grammar tag.
P7: "Why are you stick it in without my permission"
"It's actually feels good even though it's my first time!?"
"did something like that can be true?"
P9: "Carp" LMAO
p11: "Hubby you're like boobs right?" no but I think the translator is a boob.
P13: "In the first place, I'm the who got hubby virginity!" sounds like something Doctor Seuss would write in his book tbh.
and then this translator has the balls to ask for donation, LMAO.
You know what, I'm gonna mass report this bastard kofi, just because I can.

Base +6, GeniusDuck +6, Lao Shan Long +7

Adding the tag based on current comments.

>2 works in
>already asking for donations
lol

Base +15, Gentleman Chimera +8, pooppandapoo +6, GeniusDuck +6, LightSolas +6, Ass Spanker +25, Lao Shan Long +7, ShiningBlade +6, PinguPrin +7

For someone who is only learning Japanese and English isn't even their first language, i'd say this is pretty good! keep it up!

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