EDIT: Thanks for all the comments and help. You've been very helpful and cool! My next release should be better off because of it. Big thumbs up.

What's updated: Added missing page 16 (sorry about that), I halved the file size, and I added the missing underscore in P's handle on the credits page.

ORIGINAL COMMENT
JP: https://e-hentai.org/g/1148896/c3d7ed7325/

Hi I'm new to this, but I'll be doing work helping bring more doujins into English! I've had experience translating documents for university, but never doujins before. If you wanna suggest something for me to check out DM me on Twitter (@helquiste_TL), and I might do it! Or commission it and I'll get it done guaranteed in just a few days. I have no blacklisted tags and will work on anything lmao.

See you laddies around, probably in one of P's other currently untranslated works!

(also if there are any typos or anything pls say)

Looks quite good to me. If you already had experience translating documents, I'll trust your proficiency and skip the RAW check. Some minor nitpicking:
- The file size is ultra bloated compared to RAW. I suppose it has something to do with saving files as grayscale and stuff.
- While the scan already has pretty good quality, you can benefit from a little bit of levelling.
- I'm not a font expert but is that Manga Temple? The font looks hideous despite having "manga" in its name, it's better to go with something else.

Base +25, SenpaiNM7 +6, bananaramadama-sama +7, firedragon89 +14, NailB +11

Thanks for the advice! As I do more I'll def look into diversifying my fonts and getting better/more fitting ones. And if people really don't like one I'll try to avoid it later on lol. These were the first ones I found and this was kind of a testing the waters on how typesetting felt, so I was itching to get to work with what I had.

And yeah... Damn I'm really seeing just how much larger the file size of this gallery is when compared to the JP scans I used. It must have to do with how I was exporting the finished images. I'll experiment with the settings before I work on the next P doujin I have lined up. As a massive degen that saves stuff I know how annoying it is when stuff takes up wayyy more space than it has any right to.

But yeah thanks for the tips and passing grade :) I've wanted to help add stuff to this community for a while, so it feels good to contribute :)

Base +2, hykez +8, MrGweeb +5, bananaramadama-sama +7, firedragon89 +14, Shurikensei +10, NailB +11

I dont really care for trap rider or ntr, but i find the idea of fucking someone wearing a "support" paper tag to be hilarious!
Giff pls...
And why does nitocris only wear it for a page?

Base +7, firedragon89 +14, Anonyslime +8

Good doujin, good translation, shame about the excessive black barcodes.

Base +15, firedragon89 +14

https://www.dafont.com/vanessa-bays.d4324 has a lot of good fonts (courtesy of Super Shanko). Some more stuff I noticed about cleaning:
- There are bits of leftover text on a few panels. Experienced cleaners have their tricks with these so you might want to get some advice from them on how to do it fast yet clean.
- There's some kind of distortion or artifacts near the edge of some pages. Kinda like gutter shadow, but white? Not sure what it's called. You can either clean it, or just crop it out.

Base +25, SenpaiNM7 +6, firedragon89 +14

This is nitpicking, but you missed the second underscore in the author's twitter handle on your credits page (should be @P_senpuki_ instead of @P_senpuki). I don't have any other feedback since I'm just a lowly coomer.

Base +6, Andziei +6, SenpaiNM7 +6, Keltzar +6, Xiroam +10, firedragon89 +14

Last edited on 17 February 2022, 01:16.

Base +15, IIKolibri +6, petertje +6, SenpaiNM7 +6, firedragon89 +14

Here are some more advices for you on how you can improve:
- To avoid bloating the size of your images, save black and white images as grayscale pngs and set the compression level to 9. I asume you saved the images for this doujin in RGB with 24bit or 32 bit colordepth, right? And there is no need to hold back on compression when using the png format, as the compression level only effects the rendertime for the image and not the image quality.

- While swiftly browsing through the images I've notice that you sometimes leave short words alone on a line even without the need for it like this example from page 4:
Ah...
That's
right,
but
there
is
a
better
way.

Try to avoid such things it's bad style and looks just weird. If you have the space don't leave small words alone. Like Bob Ross always said: "Everybody needs a friend"

And if you really want to improve here you can find useful resources:
https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/
AnonBlack's tTypesetting Guide: https://mangadex.org/title/08e1f85a-bb12-4fe4-aec5-0d7a80b3a261/anonblack-s-typesetting-guide?tab=chapters
https://www.ruinevil.com/rawr/editguide/index.html
https://www.insidescanlation.com/etc/the-idiots-guide-to-editing-manga/guide/main

Base +19, SenpaiNM7 +6, huhtech +28, AriesWarlock +15, Xiroam +10, firedragon89 +14, Asunaz +7

Thank you for the translation.
The suggestion I can give to you is to always translate the authors afterwords and extra pages. https://e-hentai.org/s/aa417e511d/2143951-34
In those pages we can get a lot of information and inspirations about the work that the author did or what he wanted to do. Sometimes the author say what type of work he wants to do next and other times is just a freetalk.

Base +8, firedragon89 +14, Bubblejum +6, Leonidas23 +9, NailB +11

Art 7. Plot 5. Sexiness 7. Translation 5. True to character 7. All out of 10.

Base +10