Raws: https://e-hentai.org/g/2098284/04fd2803e1/

Base +7

You know, I can appreciate you cleaning out SFX, but you could try to make it close (at least in size) to what the original looks like. For example, look at page 3, bottom left. You replaced two massive "shluuuuurps" in the JP version with a tiiiiiiiiiiiiiny "slirp" that also exposes the non-redrawn parts lmao It looks kinda poor.

Lettering and SFX typesetting is probably the most difficult "advanced" editing you can do, so I don't really have a guide to offer you, but take a look at what some letterers do for pro work or for some of the more experienced scanlation groups on here (LWB, White Symphony, RedLantern, etc.)

Base +15, valentine000 -6, Rango532 +6, Baka_Ouji +7, pkplat +13, Anson1234 +6

you know, Mao could literally just kill him

Base +7, Orengestar +7, CreeperClaw +8, Person8 -7, Asarta +6, Seviper4 +7, k_2553472 +6, MelmothTheWanderer -30, Nausea +7, Soldier A +6, collased1 +6, yonidark +6, agreg +8, and 2 more...

Can you do the legend of Heroes series next? Is a crime Sanatuki isn't translated more xD

Base +6, doujin2 +6, Holion -7

there's a lot of perverted horny faces here
nice

Base +18, Person8 +7, Wice111 +6, Baka_Ouji +7, yonidark +6, morbious37 +6

@Red 255: ikr, what that guy is doing is kinda like creating the fuel the demon race used to thrive on, if nothing else Mao should have been getting stronger....

Base +11, Asarta +6, Soldier A +6, ZeroRazor +6, yonidark +6, agreg +8, Anson1234 +6

grammar errors here and there but fappable

Base +5

it's NOT Katsumi Emi, but Yusa Emi...

Base +7, plusarkos +6, yonidark +6, Anson1234 +6

Still a better ending for the LN then the real one.

Base +6, iamup2nogood +11, MelmothTheWanderer +37, silverballz +6, Almasy +6, sleepergnome +6, Orion9137 +11, ZeroRazor +6, xecofi +6

Man, this doujin is hot.

Grammar is kinda shit though.

Last edited on 15 March 2022, 02:23.

Base +6, koroko +6, plusarkos +6

Not a bad concept, I don't really have any problem with Maou losing his "harem", but this was just a straight copy of the hentai Neromashin made years ago, he just changed who made the mass hypnosys and didn't show the parts with the girls being freed from it for a short time so to make despair mana pile up.
Because following the rules of the story this magic needs mana, and in the modern world that is made from people bad feelings, it wasn't even brought up at the start.

feels just like this author wanted some revenge on Maou afte reading the Neromashin take.

Base +10