Good choices were made with the viewing angles and I like the perilous themes.
Maybe just touch up the grammar a little to make it flow better when read, and fix the mod issue that causes the uhh... interesting nipples? I'd also prefer just a little bit more length in what I'd consider a part 1 but that might just be me.
But yeah, not bad at all, I'm gonna favourite it to see if you add more later ;)