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Raw: https://e-hentai.org/g/1664488/a787e2fa80 (page 298)

Oh at last! And warabino matsuri has not been doing much lately of masterpiece like this

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A classic !

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You should probably brush up on your Japanese before offering paid commissions.

rough translation

Page 1
Your TL: I learned again how to handle a stupid little sister.
JP text: 俺はまた一つ愚妹と付き合い方について学んだ
Author intent: I learned one more thing about/when dealing with my little sister...

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Your TL: She studied online twice before falling asleep. I can't her anything like this!
JP text: 二度と休みとってまでコイツ勉強なんぞ教えん・・・
Author intent: You got this completely wrong. It's linked with the previous line. "I'll never take time off to help her study [teach her how to study] [again]...!" 二度と = never again. Not "studied twice." Notice how your own TL makes these lines completely disjointed and nonsensical in English.

Page 2
Your TL: Aah... This... is terrible...
JP text: あー ヤ・・・バいなコレ
Author intent: He's not saying that this is a terrible situation. He's basically implying he wants to go all out. See next line. "Aah, shit... this is bad."

Page 2
Your TL: I want to put it in... easy...!
JP text: 吸いつくみたいで我慢が・・・！
Author intent: Made-up line. See connection with previous line. "It's like [her tits] are sticking [to my cock]. I can't take it [anymore]...!

Page 4
Your TL: This is terrible... what am I doing...
JP text: ヤ・・・バ どうすんだ これ・・・
Author intent: Wrong verb tense, and again "terrible" is the wrong word. "Oh shit... What should I do about this...?" He's basically panicking at the thought that she might wake up and bust him, so he's thinking about how to clean up. He's not reflecting on the morality of his actions like your line implies.

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Your TL: Th-this is... uuh...
JP text: こ これはもう・・・
Author intent: He's basically saying he already fucked up, and he might as well go all out now. See next line. "Th... this is already... [bad enough/a disaster/etc]"

Page 4
Your TL: I'm getting turned on, so now I'll do all sort of things...!
JP text: 開き直って色々しちゃうのが正解なのでは・・・！？
Author intent: See above. He's convincing himself that the correct way to go about this now is to go all out and do "all sorts of things." No mentions of being horny.

Page 6
Your TL: Aaw... You're awful! You were caught in the act!
JP text: はーいサイテー男を現行犯逮捕ー
Author intent: Your line implies she's disappointed or mad that he got caught or something lol. She's just teasing him, like "haha, i caught you, the criminal (i.e, pulling her legs around him) while you're raping me. "Okaaaay, one scumbag caught red-handed and bagged [for his crime]!" You can word this however you want.

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Your TL: I'll do even more than that.
JP text: ・・・はい
Author intent: He just says "...Yes." Idk where your line comes from.

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Your TL: Sure...
JP text: う・・・
Author intent: He's not saying うん, he's saying う. "Ugh..." or "Urk..."

edit: looked at the wrong lines for the last two, kek. Removed the tag as it doesn't meet the required cap, but you're still averaging 1.3 TL mistakes per page, which is crazy.

Last edited on 01 May 2022, 03:32.

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I'd like to point your mistake with the last two points.

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My TL: ,.,Sure.
JP text: ・・・はい

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My TL: I'll do even more than that.
JP text: 超します

But I agree with the rest. This is my first translation, so of course I'll make a few mistakes. I hope I'll do better in my next project.

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@Revelations72

...why not fix up this release instead?

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Mission accomplished.

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My TL: ,.,Sure.
JP text: ・・・はい

"Sure" is a bit too confident for his reply in this context. This one is more "...yes" or rather a almost negative "...okay"

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