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WE CUMING

ok

Base +6, silentmetronome -6, Dark Mac -12, DarkTemplarXIII +6

Dude can't speak English but still trying to translate.

Base +6, silentmetronome +6, Bit by Bit +6, CaptainFlint +6, DarkTemplarXIII +6, gooched +6, zykyne +6

I'm... glad that was such a bonding experience for them?

Base +16, Orengestar +7, zykyne +6, zarazza +6

These comments are written as if the translator were reading them. I hope pokom isn't actually the translator.
I can see how some of these errors were made based on japanese sentence structure, but a lot of it is just not great english.
Poor/rough grammar:
Page 2:
* "women only can experience events that make the most of futanari." - "only women can" would be correct. Not to mention the overall awkwardness of the rest of the sentence.
* "Isn't a sailor suit too much for a quirky, age-appropriate person?" - I have no idea what "quirky" is being used for here.

Page 3:
* "Come on! we all cum at the same time!" - "let's all cum at the same time!" would be a proper imperative sentence.
* "We cuming!" - "We're cumming." Both words in that sentence are incorrect.
* "Is it time to experience this one?" is super awkward. "Is it time to try" or "is it time for" would both be better.
- And this one isn't incorrect grammar, but as a proofreader I do still want to point out that "is that so?" - while accurate - is not really the mode of speech I'd expect someone to be using here. "Is it?" would be better. "Is that so?" sounds super formal.

Page 4:
* "Juices" can be plural, but "overflowing with it" (juice) would be a correct way to end that sentence, since the juice as a whole forms one liquid "unit."
* "The feel of a woman's soft skin enveloping my body!" is not a complete sentence.
* "And yet, a hard cock fucks my pussy" - I think i get what you're going for - the dichotomy of the girl and the dick. But this is another sentence fragment. These should be one sentence. Maybe separated with '...'.
* "Remica, You're feeling great" - "Y" in "You're" should be lowercase. Also, more importantly, "You feel great" (or amazing, or whatever other word you want) is correct. "You're feeling great" is someone telling someone else what feeling that other person is experiencing.
-This one isn't actually wrong, so it doesn't count, but I personally think "I'll empty the condom on you later" would sound better.

Page 5:
* "You can feel each other and feel good about each other this way" - I have absolutely no idea what this means.
* "This ♥ Oh no♥" - probably should just remove the "This♥", since it means absolutely nothing.
- "with a raw dick right now" - that's called "rawdog." or "without a condom." Not actually wrong, but not great either.

Page 6:
* "Excuse me, deep in the pussy/I'm cuming" - Maybe this should be "I'm sorry... I'm cumming inside!". Also 'cumming' is misspelled once again.
* "it's the last semen pack" - I have no idea what this means.

Page 7:
* Misspelled "cumming" three times. So three of the four words on the page are wrong.

Page 8:
* "I don't care what happens to you. I love you!" - How does one not care about someone while loving them? Maybe you mean "I'm okay with whatever happens"? Technically these individual sentences are grammatically correct, but they cancel each other's meanings out and so syntactically this is broken.
* "Huh... totally" - no idea what this is in response to. This is a non-sequitur.
- This isn't poor grammar, but you cropped the text off the edge of of the bubbles near the right side of the page.

Base +24, Mossberg590 +6, shrinkos +6

Well, it's pokom, so I'm not really surprised...

Base +5, Xalren525 +6, Lilisionnach -10

This isn't supposed to be tagged rough grammar if it was translated by the creator, since that tag only applies to 3rd party translations. Stupid rule if you ask me, but a rule nonetheless. I'm not sure if it actually was translated by the author, comments on other translated galleries by the same author said so.

Base +9, Shimeru +6, Rylus08 +6, cutegyaru +16, Mossberg590 +6, Darker7 +7