Hello, today I bring you the second story of the month called "The Soldier", a story set in the middle of the 20th century in Europe, I hope you like it.

In my fanbox (https://gabriellm180.fanbox.cc/) you will have access to a mega to get the images without censorship and a version without text and editing.

I also have to clarify that I have uploaded another story in my fanbox for those who support me, don't worry, that story will be published by this medium later, without further ado I say goodbye, good morning everyone!

Her mouth being open on nearly every frame with the same gap feels weird, i think you wanted to display her talking but she just looks paralyzed. The eyes also are barely emotive. The poses taken look pretty good tho.

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There are some pacing issues here. Especially at the beginning and the end. There's several instances of the character saying basically the same thing.

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The story is great BUT WHY IT THE USSR UNIFORM on girl? Why she hold a US navy revolver it's historically inaccurate!

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