https://www.derpibooru.org/tags/artist-colon-snspony

More pls this would be a good long term story.

Base +8

That is one prego Fluttershy, definitely gonna be a C-section... This looks and reads very rough draft or is a first-time comic, and the pillow talk definitely needs work. They said each other's names about 30 times in 2 min which is very stale. Overall it could be worse, but it wasn't terrible. Definitely room for improvement though.

Base +7, Seratonine +6, Franck232 -6

>They said each other's names about 30 times in 2 min which is very stale

Stale, perhaps, but that's how real couples talk - during casual intercourse, of course, 'cause 'talk to me dirty'/roleplay is a thing, yadda-yadda, and so on.

Of course, this being a written story and all, 'how real people talk' is not among the better approaches to handling a dialogue - but far from the worst //Vietnam flashbacks to Akiva Goldsman's logorrheic vomit

But, yes - room for improvement definitely is there.

Base +31, Seratonine +6, Franck232 +6

I like how earnest it reads

Base +6