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[bebebe] Shin Mesugaki to Taisen 5 | Playing with the new college brat #5 [English]

[べべべ] 新メスガキと対戦5 [英訳]

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Posted:2022-07-28 04:14
Parent:2281904
Visible:Yes
Language:English  TR
File Size:58.05 MiB
Length:12 pages
Favorited:1189 times
Rating:
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Average: 4.38

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Posted on 28 July 2022, 04:14 by:   Taka-kun    PM
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Hi reader here Doroban(the person who translated this culture material) hope you have enjoy the translation, it is a little bad but I made it with love. Any feedbacks you have you can put in the comments, I‘ll read them.
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Posted on 25 July 2022, 02:45 by:   Mr_Person    PM
Score +264
pg. 1: Sorry for make you wait > Sorry for making you wait
pg. 1: That thicc ass of you, come here. > That thicc ass of yours, come here. (also did you really have to say thicc here)
pg. 2: Since this bikini look great on me > Since this bikini looks great on me
pg. 2: I'll may at least allow you to take some picture of me > I'll at least allow you to take some pictures of me
pg. 2: But since the only thing you have in mind is sex, sure that's a shame for you, right? > But since the only thing you have on your mind is sex, I'm sure you're disappointed, right? (awkward wording, you don't have to stick so strictly to Japanese syntax)
pg. 3: Airi want to have sex too, right? > Airi wants to have sex too, right?
pg. 3: ...nice little know place > ...nice little known place
pg. 3: We make a good couple, isn't it? > We make a good couple, don't we?
pg. 3: It's just imagination!! > It's just your imagination!!
pg. 3: I can see it in your face > I can see it on your face
pg. 4: Don't enjoy this > Didn't enjoy this
pg. 4: The quickly as possible, didn't you? > As quickly as possible, didn't you?
pg. 5: Seat...Sweat!! > Swe-Sweat! (I can only hope she's not saying it's sweat from sitting down, otherwise, bro)

This is not an attempt to correct your translation, it is beyond saving. I don't think English is your native language, and as such I don't think you should be translating into a language that you're not completely proficient in. All the English in this translation is incredibly poor and awkward to read. Please, if you feel you have to translate into English, get someone to proofread your work first so it doesn't become almost unreadable for others.

Please also consult resources to improve things like your editing, as since you've applied such a thin outline to the text, it's kinda hard to read:

https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/

I hope you'll take this as criticism and not a personal attack and try to improve your translations in the future. Good luck man.
Posted on 25 July 2022, 02:50 by:   cutegyaru    PM
Score +161
tagging. thanks to Mr_Person

pg. 1: Sorry for make you wait > Sorry for making you wait
pg. 1: That thicc ass of you, come here. > That thicc ass of yours, come here. (also did you really have to say thicc here)
pg. 2: Since this bikini look great on me > Since this bikini looks great on me
pg. 2: I'll may at least allow you to take some picture of me > I'll at least allow you to take some pictures of me
pg. 2: But since the only thing you have in mind is sex, sure that's a shame for you, right? > But since the only thing you have on your mind is sex, I'm sure you're disappointed, right? (awkward wording, you don't have to stick so strictly to Japanese syntax)
pg. 3: Airi want to have sex too, right? > Airi wants to have sex too, right?
pg. 3: ...nice little know place > ...nice little known place
pg. 3: We make a good couple, isn't it? > We make a good couple, don't we?
pg. 3: It's just imagination!! > It's just your imagination!!
pg. 3: I can see it in your face > I can see it on your face
pg. 4: Don't enjoy this > Didn't enjoy this
pg. 4: The quickly as possible, didn't you? > As quickly as possible, didn't you?
pg. 5: Seat...Sweat!! > Swe-Sweat! (I can only hope she's not saying it's sweat from sitting down, otherwise, bro)
Posted on 25 July 2022, 05:24 by:   Taka-kun    PM
Score +75
Thank you for the feedback, I'm gonna check the article and I will correct the errors you mentioned
I'm gonna try another type of edition in my next translation too

thank you again❤
Posted on 25 July 2022, 08:05 by:   Hoandini108    PM
Score +66
For what it's worth, she is definitely NOT in college.
Posted on 25 July 2022, 09:23 by:   Trane00    PM
Score -27
Thank you very much sir for translating this!
This is really good stuffs!
Posted on 26 July 2022, 02:20 by:   H0R0    PM
Score +12
Black text: male character
Red text: female character

P.4
the red text block at lower left (in front her face) sounds a lots like what the male character would say in stead of the female character would say.
Posted on 26 July 2022, 02:40 by:   Altona Falcon    PM
Score +18
My Japanese sucks too much to know if the other series posted on the site is #1 to 4. I guess if this is #5, the other 4 have to be around somewhere?
Posted on 26 July 2022, 06:26 by:   Boomer30569    PM
Score +53
>made with love
>now give me money for it
Posted on 02 August 2022, 17:23 by:   Wilfriback    PM
Score +23
Chapter 6 is out

Also, bruh, love is better with some money to spare.

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