Page 1:

Im sorry! Keep you waiting? > I'm sorry! Did I keep you waiting?

i > I

doesnt > doesn't

I follow you > I'll follow you

Page 2:

Is cute, isn't it? > It's cute, isn't it?

Arent it for kids? > Aren't they for kids?

Now we have a good friends relationship > Now we're good friends, or, Now our relationship is that of good friends

dont > don't

Page 3:

Its > It's

What do i do with this flowers > What do I do with these flowers?

Page 4:

My friend is in the platform that's in front. > My friend is on the platform that's in front (of you (probably))

Page 5:

She haven't changed > She hasn't changed

Im > I'm

Base +15, Moof22 +7, Glovelove. +22, Teabbagins +6

Grammarly is a free app. That would catch these kinds of mistakes.

Base +11, Tryndamere95 +17, Exham +6

No wonder the art looked familiar. This is the same artist from that ecchi loli series with time travel shenanigans Ore Wa Lolicon Janai!

Base +17, Tryndamere95 +17, Gitami +12

Page 3+4+7+8: ¿!Eh!? ¿...? iiKaho-chan!!

We don't use inverted punctuation in the English language, so either change it to HUE HUE or Spanish as the language tag.

Base +7, Gitami +12, Xadt0490 +7

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