Translation: https://twitter.com/ixDoujinshi
Artist's PIXIV: https://www.pixiv.net/en/users/374953
RAW: https://e-hentai.org/g/2299564/97d240e582/

Freckles on boobs is too OP, please nerf

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>it's not actually BA character just a hag cosplaying as one
>all those bukkake action and yet no a single anal/vaginal creampie

heck look at this https://e-hentai.org/s/4166fd59e5/2310526-25 after all those fucking and her anus and vagina is still "clean" ?

I don't know man but this doujinshi feel so half-assed

RAW:https://e-hentai.org/g/2299564/97d240e582/

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You're missing the final page. Also, did something happen to your cover page? It's lower rez than the rest/raws (and with exceedingly different styling than the actual cover. Like... we all know you didn't redraw lol.)

Anyway, nitpicks.

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https://ehwiki.org/wiki/Renaming#Naming_Style

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>all those bukkake action and yet no a single anal/vaginal creampie

Does every single doujin in existence have to end with the girl getting x-ray impregnated five times over and drowning in semen? I like this slightly more "realistic" approach where they use protection in a group setting. Also, it leaves room for more intense stuff in a sequel.

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yeah, biggest issue is the author decides to make her a virgin and a slut at 30.

I'm watching a plus sized slut get gang banged. I dont need to know she was a virgin or whatever.

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she was a virgin with that body and that kind of submissive mentality, sure...

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The cosplaying/cosplayer story line are really underused. This is some good stuff

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@Red 255
you ESL or something? that's her speech bubble, the guy is the (formerly) virgin one

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@Larequirem
It's not half assed it's just not what you wanted. Don't be a baby

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page 09 dat ass face.

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lmao shiroko's mask at the end

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