I machine translated this with the help of DeePL and Japanese OCR and corrected the sentences, sorry if it isn't as accurate to the original! I changed the dialogue a little.

oh as long is understandable it okay but keep in mind there's alot of people will bash you cuz of shitty translation but ignore those goons.

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> fan-translated

No shit. Look at the website where you posted this translation. You think most of the stuff here is non-fan-translated?

> DeepL

Please add [MTL] to the title to alert others. Better to add the tag yourself and get shit on less than not add it in and get shit on later.

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Geez, It's my first time i ever translated

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Translating is tough business

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Looking at the first 4 pages:

Pg.4
>Um... Agil? Why are you taking all your clothes off?
だ、だからどうして全部脱ぐのよ!?
So, why in the world are you taking your clothes off!?
(You're missing the tone here, even changing the punctuation at the end)

>Well, that's because doing it without them is more exciting
いや、そっちのが絶対興奮するからよ
(Missing the '絶対/definitely/absolutely' here)

>Now, just wrap your arms around me and I'lll keep you all warm. Mmm... Aah...
ちょっと手を掴んで勝手に操作しないでよもう…っ…ンん…っ!
Hang on, stop grabbing my hands and manipulate(undress) me on your own...Kh...Nmm...Nh!
(This is Asuna's bubble, not Agil's)

>Haah, you really took it all off, just like I said~~
ホントに全部脱がすんだから
You really did strip me all naked, didn't you?
(This is Asuna's bubble)

>Well? Isn't doing it like this exciting?
どうだ?いつもと違うだろ
How is it? It's different from the usual, isn't it?

>Y-yes...
んぁ…ぁ
Nha...Ah
(While ああ can rarely be found as an affirmative in manga, it's definitely not written in small Kana)

Pg.5
>But first how about warming up this side of the room?
とはいえ先ずはこっちを暖めてくれねぇか
But before that, can you warm this one up first, Asuna?

>This thing here's been stiff and hard for a while now, it's asking to be all warmed up...
暖めるもなにももうガチガチじゃない
What's there to warm up anymore? Your thing is already so stiff/rock-hard.
(Again, Asuna's bubble)

>There's no way anyone won't get hard from seeing dear Asuna all naked~
アスナの裸みて起たねぇヤツはただのインポだよ
Any chump who couldn't get it up after seeing you naked is simply impotent.

>I knew you'd do it, you love being praised don't you~
やっぱりおしゃぶりが好きなんじゃねぇのか?
After all, you really like giving me head, don't ya?

Pg.6
>Your dick...
うほぉ
Uhoooh
(Agil's bubble)

>So big and hard... Hmm...
んん…っふうう ンむん…んん
Nnh...Fuuh Mmmnn... Nnnn
(This is just moaning)

>Ohh, digging right in as usual,
>I fucking love it...
おお…いつもながら
最高だわ…
Oooh... As always,
Your blowjob is the best/so damn good.

>I should get you to do this more. Let's do it at my place next time?
ああ…いいぜ次はカリのところ頼むわ
Aah... That's it, can you do/play with the tip/head (of my penis) next?

(Some weird sexual euphemism about 'harden the tongue as if to try to scrape the dick' so I can understand if you don't want to do it.)

Pg.7
>Don't you just love it when one does a good blowjob?
イマラチオも好きだろ?
You like it when I shove it in/did the moving, don't you?

>Hmm? Do it like I taught you
で、どうするの?
So, what are you going to do?

>Oh ho? Whatever do you mean~
どうするって?
Huh? What am I going to do?

>Y-yes... Please...
も、もう…だから
Wh-... What I meant is...

>Please ejaculate your semen into my mouth
このまま口に射精するの?
...(As it is,) Are you going to shoot it in my mouth or not?
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Leveling the pages for scanned doujin is a must really, especially for one with washed-out black and white points like this. Since it only took only half a minute to get the setup anyway.
Ideally, you should also dust/clean it too but I can understand if it's too bothersome.

Anyway, I'll put my script on the back burner since it's no longer urgent anymore.

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MTL bad sirs, please no MTL sirs, thank you very much sirs

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Thanks @decidua for the translation and tips. Curiosity and horniness led me to do a really bad MTL translation as I just wanna read it in english. I don't really know all this stuff about page stuff, I simply took the raw and translated it on Photoshop. I wasted 14 hours doing this shit, no more I guess XD
I'll just wait for a better translation next time

Yeah @ SuperGenericAnon I quit

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I mean... its MTL. You have to expect you're gonna get shit on.

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@excist
If you're confident with your English, feel free to hmu as a proofreader when there's a solid Asuna doujins in the future since that's where I'm lacking (Or as a typesetter too if you're willing since I'm a bit lazy...)

There are some ancient Asuna doujins I've wanted to work on too but, I just can't see myself dumping hours if not dozens into them on my own.

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@decidua

Thanks for the offer ^^ Will let you know if I ever do it again XD

@psychicdoom

Yessu, Lesson learnt XD

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Surprisingly wholesome.

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@decidua Damn, will you do vanilla Asuna as well or only NTR?

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@skatlads15
No particular preference tbh, as long as the art & the dicking itself is damn good. Most of the old doujins that haven't been translated yet are vanilla fwiw (E.g. https://e-hentai.org/g/1083836/1a9167d3eb/).
Tho I probably gonna be backporting the Astral Bout tankoubon & its bonus first before doing any of them. Not to mention other non-Asuna works too...

Typesetters are welcome, proofreaders are especially so.

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@decidua
Ah that's cool. I like both as well, but too much NTR recently lol. And good luck on your work! I'm not really experienced with any of this, but you're doing good work!

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