@ cutegyaru

I will re-edit the previous chapters and edit all your corrections in the scanlation after completing the manga.

The next evolution of stelok: MTL. It goes perfectly well with the care you put into your "editing".

rough translation

Page 3
Your TL: Nh
JP text: んっ・・・もう・・・
Author intent: You're just guessing the meaning. "Nh... I can't..." // (see next line)

Page 3
Your TL: Ah
JP text: ダメ・・・
Author intent: Another random guess. This is a continuation of the previous line. "anymore..." Together: Nh... I can't [take it/hold back] // anymore... alternatively: "Nh... Jeez... // Stop it already/don't..." It's a bit ambiguous, but either way it's not what you wrote.

Page 4
Your TL: Just... still... oh my god
JP text: ちょっと・・・まだ・・・こんなところで・・・もう
Author intent: Another guess. "Hold on... I'm/we're still... Not right here... jeez.."

Page 4
Your TL: You're crazy! It's good, right?
JP text: おら！気持ちいいだろ！？コレがいんだろ？
Author intent: Where does "you're crazy" come from?

Page 7
Your TL: Time to go to school...
JP text: 学校開くまもう少しか・・・
Author intent: Your line would imply school has started. It's the opposite. "Still some time left before the school opens up, huh..?"

Page 8
Your TL: That girl?
JP text: あれ誰？
Author intent: Who's that?

Page 8
Your TL: If you don't come to school a little longer, you'll have to repeat a year.
JP text: お前もう少し学校に来ないと留年になるぞ
Author intent: Coming to school a little longer implies she comes to school, but doesn't stay long enough. What he's telling her is to actually come to school more, not longer.

Page 11
Your TL: Eh? Sex? They are doing it? Even though you are at home?
JP text: え？・・・母親が・・・男を？・・・不倫？・・・浮気？・・・それを家で？・・・子供がいるのに？・・・
Author intent: Omitting half the dialogue. "Wait, what? Her mother is bringing men over? She's being adulterous... she's cheating? And she's doing it all at home while her kid is there?"

Page 11
Your TL: It's got bigger, sensei. You've got to put your sole in there.
JP text: 大きくなあった先生のソレを入れることですよ
Author intent: The fact that you translated ソレ as sole is hilarious. Re-read your sentence and try to see if it makes any sense. It's a euphemism for cock.

Page 12
Your TL: N... No! This... this is... // Really?
JP text: ち・・・ちがう！こ・・・これは
Author intent: I love subtle interactions like this. Her response, "Really?", doesn't make sense with your TL. Really what? What he's saying is "You're w... wrong! This is..." Now the "Really?" makes sense, i.e "I'm wrong? Really?" This is bit nitpicky, so here's one more.

Page 15
Your TL: Can't I do something? // Vacation, huh?
JP text: 俺に何か・・・できないのか？// 休みか・・・
Author intent: Is there [really] nothing I can do? // She's absent ­[again], huh...? or "She took [today] off, huh...?"

Page 24
Your TL: Her?
JP text: 彼女の・・・？
Author intent: Nope, she's asking if the clothes are his gf's.

Page 25
Your TL: Hmm... is she?
JP text: 彼女は・・・？
Author intent: Dude, this is so completely nonsensical. She's asking if he has a gf.

Page 26
Your TL: I don't see her...
JP text: いないよ・・・
Author intent: Complete nonsense again. He's telling her he doesn't have a gf.

edit: typo
edit2: more mistakes to keep the tag (which wasn't very difficult because 80% of your dialogue is wrong). I love how you didn't even fix the fucking mistakes I wrote on chapter 1 LMAO. I will admit you trying to change the MTL output to make sense is starting to border on a rewrite.

Last edited on 12 December 2022, 01:27.

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There's a special place in hell for people that just do MTLs instead of learning the language and going for computer-assisted translations.

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Yay, especially with such a poor typesetting.

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