feel to point out any corrections

Let me guess, the idea of searching for a typesetting tutorial never crossed your mind before starting this, right? To makeit short, the typesetting is garbage.
Rotating text from horizantal to vertical is big no. You're also missing basic punctuation and all capital letters. Also no comic font in sight. I don't want list every mistake you made with the typesetting because the only thing you did correctly was using center align for the text and that's it.

Before you continue to upload anything read typesetting tutorials like the following:

https://www.insidescanlation.com/etc/the-idiots-guide-to-editing-manga/guide/main
https://mangadex.org/title/08e1f85a-bb12-4fe4-aec5-0d7a80b3a261/anonblack-s-typesetting-guide?tab=chapters
https://www.ruinevil.com/rawr/editguide/index.html
https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/

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-Rotating text from horizantal to vertical is big no.
i know
-You're also missing basic punctuation and all capital letters.
i know
-Also no comic font in sight
i know

all valid advice but there's only so much effort i'm willing to expend while fiddling around on mobile. so yes, the typesetting is trash and it will remain trash.

as long as the story and meanings are conveyed correctly, i'm satisfied. so to reiterate; feel free to point any corrections with the translations.

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@DoItMyself, If you can't be arsed to apply basic punctuation, capitalization and proper typesetting, then why bother? There is a reason why those language rules have been invented, and it's because for most people it makes the act of reading a more enjoyable experience. Well, I guess I will skip the other parts considering you yourself state that you are too lazy to follow convention when it comes to typesetting and punctuation.

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'then why bother?'

i mean that's a pretty simple question to answer. i haven't really been following anything manga/anime related in years, and only just got back into it recently because okashiratsuki was finally fully translated. so i decided to check out some previous titles i was interested in, to see if they had any translations. one of them was this one.

so why bother translating an age old unpopular hentai title? because i'm interested in clout? nah i'm doing this purely for myself because i'm personally interested in the story .

'Well, I guess I will skip the other parts considering you yourself state that you are too lazy to follow convention when it comes to typesetting and punctuation.'

i mean that's perfectly fine it's your prerogative. if my typesetting is trash and offends convention don't let me waste your time.

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@DoItMyself
Quote: ....there's only so much effort i'm willing to expend while fiddling around on mobile....

You're using a smartphone for typesetting??????????? (jaw dropping)
As much as tech compoanies and other businesses are trying to make not owning one impossible and despite all technical improvements, typesetting manga on them isn't one of their strong points. (As you have proven)

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I didn't read past the first few pages but fyi

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OG: 先ほどお届けした曲Superflyの今年二月に発売された愛をこめてー
TL: "The song I just brought you is by Superfly, released in January of this year "With Love".
ED: wrong month

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nice catch. thanks for the correction

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