Nagatoro's not the only one with noodly appendages, and I ain't talking the Flying Spaghetti Monster.

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I still wish there was more of Hana, and Sana in this but overall it's one of the best doujinshi we've gotten for Nagatoro so far. Also not enough of that smegma slurping slut Sakura. We need more works so the Big Senpai Cock can be known to all!

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1. Wrong resolution. You used the 1280x downsized version of the images. Originals are at 2081 x 3024. Download the archive or download the non-downsized torrent (right side.)
2. Your fonts are basically unreadable. Try some of these: Wild Words, CCVictory Speech, Spinner Rack BB, Richard Starkings.
3. Any reason why you're ignoring most of the handwritten text? A lot of it is actual dialogue, not moans.
4. Some of your TL is completely wrong.

rough tl

Page 2
Your TL: If you do, your cock is gonna go inside me
JP text: ほらほらセンパイのチンポが私の中に入りたくてビクビクしてますよ
Author intent: Look at this! Your cock wants to go inside me so much it's all twitchy!

Page 3
Your TL: But I want to take care of Senpai's dick!
JP text: でもセンパイのドーテー大事にしないと！
Author intent: She's teasing him. She's saying they have to treasure his virginity (and thus, not put in.)

Page 3
Your TL: nil
JP text: ああっダメだっ
Author intent: Aah! No, stop! or Aaah! I can't take it!

Page 4
Your TL: Here, I'll lower my hips for a bit
JP text: ほらほら私がちょっと腰を下がろせばはいっちゃうっスよ
Author intent: Look here! It'll slip inside my pussy if I lower my hips juuuuust a bit [more]!

Page 6
Your TL: Don't get up too quickly, now Hayacchi
JP text: ハヤっちも暫く起きねえよ
Author intent: Idk why you word it as something she's telling Hayacchi. "Hayacchi won't get up for a while."

Page 7
Your TL: Oppai!
JP text: ムリスジ
Author intent: Meaning 無理筋, meaning something that makes no sense/an illogical/crazy plan or move.

Page 9
Your TL: So deep!
JP text: 奥ついていい！
Author intent: I love getting fucked deep!

Page 9
Your TL: It feels so good...
JP text: うわっ締まってっ・・・
Author intent: Whoa, you're so tight...

Page 9
Your TL: Yoshi... You're licking it...
JP text: ヨッシーそれっヤバっ
Author intent: I'm tempted to say your line above is better here. "Yosshi! This [getting licked] feels crazy!"

Page 10
Your TL: Aaaah
JP text: ああっイクっイッちゃうっ
Author intent: Aah! I'm cumming! I'm cummiiiing!

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Long cock, but where is the Thickness!? It looks a bit odd, but sexing those girls is worth it!

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The way that Sakura just showed up in a panel on that one page , how many of the readers didn't notice until all the shocked expressions at the end?

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this translation sucks.

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