RAW: https://e-hentai.org/s/3fed286dc6/1486908-170

I'm begging you bro, just get 1 PR that's native. Also use proper punctuation. PERIODS.

Page 1.

"A foreigner who come to stay in the neighborhood" > "A foreigner that came to stay in the neighborhood/A foreigner that had come to stay in the neighborhood"

Page 2.

Are you fishing something? > Are you fishing?

By any chance, aren't you the one who came to stay recently... > By any chance, are you the one who came to stay recently.../By any chance, aren't you the one who's came recently to stay...

half naked > half-naked

You don't dress like a person who come to play at countryside > You don't dress like a person that's come to play at/in the countryside.

Page 3.

I'm like pretty sure bare-open isn't a word. Baring yourself wide open/exposing yourself/baring yourself for the world to see?

Page 4.

It's so hard handling all the free time by myself, so please be my companion. > It's so hard handling all this free time by myself/It's so dealing with all this free time by myself.

Page 5.

That's because the villager keeps staring at me, it's so scary > That's because the villagers keep staring at me. It's so scary.

I promised, I'd show you! > I promised I'd show you!

That's why, please stay with a bit longer with me! > That's why, please stay with me a bit longer!

Page 7.

I've been thinking of this since earlier. It's so soft... > I've been thinking this since earlier, but...it's so soft (It doesn't make sense for it to be a full stop there. The first thought doesn't follow into the second one. If you're gonna us the first sentence "I've been thinking of this since earlier." verbatim, you gotta have it second like, "They're so soft...I've been thinking of this since earlier." It still sounds like shit but at least it makes sense.

Page 12.

Coming > Cumming (I'm docking points for this)

Page 17.

Come > Cum

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"A foreigner who" is actually correct over "A foreigner that" (bad English habits and all, to the point where "that" and "who" are now accepted interchangeably even though they traditionally have different use cases - if the subject is a person, it's "whom" or "whom", depending on how the sentence is constructed).

The rest of the sentence is obviously wrong though.
And, you know, all the other stuff.

It's like everyone went "holy shit, it's a new year, time to dump our collective asses all over this site". The amount of garbage uploaded in the past week or two is unbelievable...

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The girl's a hoe and she belongs to the streets.

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If I was bored while visiting somewhere else, I'd probably just play on my phone. Have I been missing out?

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It's actually impressive that there is someone who supposedly proofreads this group's translation. And yet they're consistently bad at doing said job.
Also, obviously the new year means that collective standards of everyone is reset as well. Can't have high standards if there's no bar yet cause of the new year amirite?

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