1. Wrong resolution. Originals are at 3031 x 4230. Download the archive or the non-downsized torrent (right side.)
2. You could put some effort into removing floating text and redrawing, but I guess this is your first release.
3. Some of your translation is wrong (see p.8 floating text. it's basically made-up.)

rough grammar

every page: random punctuation.

p.3 my son seems to come late from the club activities > it seems my son will come home late from his club activities.
p.3 of course I got dumped > this makes no sense. he can't get "dumped" if he's not dating her. I got turned down/rejected
p.3 a month ago, I build up > built up
p.4 I made a promise to make memories for just one day > "I promised her this would only be a one-day/time thing." if you want to keep the super clunky "make memories" part, then I guess you can add "so that we can make memories."
p.6 with rumi-san's sweet and voice and her scent // makes me so excited > Rumi-san's sweet voice and scent // make me
p.9 it's feels > it
p.15 rumi-san tongue > rumi-san's
p.15 it's so big that my chin will come off > lol what. "It's so big I feel like my jaw's gonna dislocate!"
p.17 it's the first that someone cum in my throat > it's the first time someone's cum down my throat
p.20 my waist feels like floating > it feels like my waist is floating
p.21 but no matter how sweet it is > sweet doesn't work here. maybe "no matter how good it felt"
p.21 would you like to stay over at my house after a long time > after a long time makes 0 sense
p.22 please take a good care > cut "a"

there's more, but there you go

Base +21, Gelus +12, cybeast93 +20, retoman7 +7, LingeringMemories +14, Th3 Sl0th +6, CantStopHodoring +6, ikurry +6, Analfe Tish +9, dankestdungeon +23, faytT +7, PinguPrin +7, DragonClaw +9, and 15 more...

There needs to be something done about this. It is getting out of control.

Base +9, ikurry +6, faytT +7, PinguPrin +7, Whitebeard666 +6, Aelth +7, chexusai +6, robotshark +6, your_name +6, Zerk Mahara +6, Ryougi +12, KuroToast +6, DJ_Puchuu +16, and 13 more...

This is better then most.

Base +8, SenpaiNM7 -6, ragnel alondite +7, hobohobo -30, Megarock90 -7, bagiaaa -13, keramat -6

Thanks for the translation

Base +5, SenpaiNM7 -6, Th3 Sl0th -6, joeyzz +6, hobohobo -30, Megarock90 -7, bagiaaa -13, keramat -6

mosaic is so shitty for doujins. why not just do full censorship even that is better than mosaic.

Base +9