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Monster Park 2 Disk 1/2 Fan Edit Segment 1

Artist CG
Posted:2023-02-07 17:39
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Language:English  RW
File Size:31.73 MiB
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Posted on 07 February 2023, 17:39 by:   PregOHoEdits    PM
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I didn't make this, this is just a fan edit I made.
Posted on 07 February 2023, 20:07 by:   Fal12    PM
Score +5
Who make the translation?
Posted on 07 February 2023, 22:14 by:   jason12052011    PM
Score +36
Per the tag definition page, " The gender of the one being sexed by the insect/maggot determines if the tag is placed in the female or male namespace."
Posted on 08 February 2023, 07:14 by:   SoloWingEVANGEL    PM
Score +67
when will there be monster park 3……
Posted on 10 February 2023, 00:14 by:   Sekk    PM
Score +20
Is this text from in-game?
Posted on 14 February 2023, 06:24 by:   45aka45    PM
Score +35
I hope this doesn't come off as rude, but I really like this series, so I'd like to help it get a good translation. Basically, there are a lot of basic spelling errors in here that won't take long to fix. The grammar could be improved, but I don't want to nitpick too much.

A few errors I caught (in order of their appearance on the page):
2: flys → flies; genitles → genitals
3: it's → its; flys → flies. This page also has some awkward translations.
4: it's → its; satified → satisfied
5: from for → from her; fly's → flies; flys → flies; "the first of eggs are being plundered" → this sounds weird
6: flys → flies; cocks → cock's; flys → flies
7: bugs → bug's; into you supple → into her supple
8: preasure → pressure; flys → flies; vertile → fertile. There are also way too many commas on this page.
9: arrivals → arrival's; jey stream → jet stream; roam → womb (this sentence is also missing prepositions, but I don't want to rewrite it here); magots → maggots
11: "plunders her cunt" → this is a bit weird; sconsciousness → consciousness; her self → herself
12: more then → more than; "rape, and breed" → no comma
13: monsterous → monstrous; be breed again → be bred again
15: preasure → pressure
16: "water, and the cum" → no comma
17: her had → her head
18: beasts → beast's; preasure → pressure; beastial → bestial. Bottom section has odd punctuation
19: post sex → post-sex; "the beast decides cock shows" → "the beast's cock shows"
20: "Without mercy, and spit, her rape comes to a close." → I don't know why spit is mentioned here; beasts → beast's; "beast's final wind" → "wind" is awkward here; girls → girl's; preasure → pressure
21: peasure -> pressure; unknowlingly -> unknowingly
22: rapers → rapists; girls → girl's
23: "lower back, and pussy" → no comma; hours old cum → hours-old cum
24: childrin → children; clumbsily → clumsily; mothers → mother's
25: "her pussy, washes over her" → no comma; preasure → pressure; succombs → succumbs
26: Bottom section is awkward
27: First sentence is awkward; "she surround but maggots" → "she is surrounded by maggots"; "they enter her cunt" → "they exit her cunt"; fathers → fathers' (plural apostrophe since she was raped by many flies); throughing → throwing; "al lthe more" → "all the more"
28: gives into → gives in to; "her lasting cum brain continues" → this makes no sense; herp pussy → her pussy. Too many commas.

Since a lot of the mistakes are repeated consistently, I'd highly recommend having a native English speaker proofread your translations if you can, regardless of how proficient you feel you are. This isn't bad by any means, but it does have a lot of mistakes in it that add up quickly.

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