RAW https://e-hentai.org/g/2455763/205e14e3c2/
The original work on fanbox: https://muramurabeat.fanbox.cc/posts/2247930

Last edited on 08 February 2023, 08:49.

Base +38, Traverse -6

good to see this great artist getting translated, their art is hot and the defeated submissive face is amazing.

@Tutulo you need to check Pulpo Azone works
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Last edited on 08 February 2023, 11:30.

Base +22, luckcrazy +6

Kissing? In my Hentai? I am being spoiled.

Base +6, Vormik +7, painly +6, lknd14 +7

Thanks for your work!

Base +6, dersied +10

Is it really too hard for you to write your script in Google Docs and proofread it ONCE? This honestly borders on complete gibberish at times.

rough grammar

p.4 he pushed me to the bed > he pushed me down on the bed
p.4 indicent > indecent
p.5 only as obligatory > this makes 0 sense
p.6 he made me take an awkward pose and take off > took off
p.6 in front on a man > of a
p.6 sucking exhaustively... / of a girl's named Tsukikage Yuri > more nonsense. You probably meant to say "Endlessly/thoroughly eating out the pussy of a girl... // named Tsukikage Yuri"
p.7 in that quiet room, only vulgar chewing sounds are > Vulgar slurping noises are the only thing you can hear in that [otherwise] quiet room.
p.7 The man gropes the clitoris without hesitation, insensitively sticks his tongue into my anus > Why do you keep swapping between 1st and 3rd person? Why do you keep omitting connectors such as "and"? The man gropes MY clitoris without hesitation AND [...]. Also, idk why you keep swapping tenses. First you're in the past, now you're in the present. Which is it?
p.7 He pushed in her fingers > HIS
p.7 Such stimulation so foreign to my body, I feel so ashamed and disgusted. > more nonsense
p.7 I try holding my voice > holding back

and there's more. on every page.

Last edited on 09 February 2023, 01:34.

Base +22, wootwoot123 +6, hobohobo +33, aukxn +21, KDBA +8, Henlor +15, kishudark +6, ultradude +6, dersied -10, BlazingFalcon +6

yeah must say reading this gave me a bit of a headache

Base +6, hobohobo +33, nurd +6, dersied -10