Raw: https://e-hentai.org/s/e8d47a2c25/1901041-85

Aria read way too much hentai. You don't negotiate a ceasefire by immediately surrendering yourself, you get a table and chairs and come to an agreement. Silly Aria.

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is this meant to be a redraw/rewrite? there's extra dialogue or changes to the existing text/sfx all over the place. it looks like you copy pasted bubbles that aren't in the raw (pg 7, pg 10 where you can even see parts of a copied bubble that you didn't clean?, pg 14, pg 17, pg 21)

the image resolution doesn't match the raw and the images themselves look different so if this isn't part of the changes between digital and printed versions then it's looking like a rough TL

the raws are from https://e-hentai.org/g/1967627/fc03094d4a/

003
OG: 私の騎士よ必ず戻ってまいれ
TL: "You are more than just my knight, so make sure to come back to me"
ED: this is just him addressing her as a knight and ordering her to return

006
OG: ほう…お前王の慰み者だったのか
TL: "I see...so you were the king's fucktoy as well? Should have guessed with a lewd body like yours"
ED: you added the entire second sentence yourself

OG: なに…貴様ぁ！！
TL: "How dare you...you bastard!! I'm not a slut!"
ED: you added the entire second sentence yourself

007
OG: 王が可愛がっておられたのだ
TL: "We'll see about that. Mmmm, the king must have loved fondling these babies."
ED: he just says the king must've been fond of her

OG: さぞかし具合がいいんだろうなあ？
TL: "Looks like you must be enjoying my attention already, eh?"
ED: he's saying the king must be in good health (directly related to prev line)

OG: N/A
TL: "That aphrodisiac I fed her is already kicking in. A few weeks of eating our food and she'll be mine for sure!"
ED: where is this bubble in the raw? (https://e-hentai.org/s/294cf2b0b8/1901041-91)

008
OG: この程度では屈しないッ
TL: "I will never yield to such a disgrace. My heart will always belong to his majesty"
ED: you added the entire second sentence yourself

OG: ならば…こちらはどうかな？
TL: "In that case...you won't mind at all if I do something like this? Surely it has no effect on a pure heart such as yours"
ED: you added the entire second sentence yourself

009
OG: いやッ
TL: "Kyaaa!"
ED: she's saying "no"

OG: 慰み者でないならここを扱かれても平気だろうなあ？
TL: "If you really weren't just the king's fucktoy, then it wouldn't bother you at all for me to finger your pussy, would it? Yet here you are, ready to cum within seconds!"
ED: you added the entire second sentence yourself

010
OG: N/A
TL: "How-how is it that big!? There's no way I can take that!"
ED: you can see leftover parts of pg 7 (https://e-hentai.org/s/744b572a37/1967627-182) which you copied this bubble from and inserted your own dialogue (https://e-hentai.org/s/62f5cf2b49/1967627-185)

Last edited on 02 March 2023, 02:14.

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This is mind break, not corruption.

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Women destroy countries, what's new.

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@Inerg needs to get a life.

As to the story, I'm curious how an enemy army could just walk up to the castle without anybody noticing, and I also wonder why there wasn't the use of say a secret passage or pass that she could have given to the enemy that helped make her an actua traitor than just walking in and being pregnant. It also doesn't make sense that she would be gone for months and that they would accept that sort of ceasefire or that the castle would be weaker by the time she shows up again.

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