My first translation work.
If you spot any errors please write in the comments.
I am eager to correct them.
I am still learning japanease so please correct me if I made any errors.

Please buy CARN まごの亭 doujins.
kk bye.

You should at the very least change the font to something that's more appropriate to this medium. I suggest using the font 'Wild Words' or 'Manga Temple'.

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I appreciate the feedback! :)
Will look into some other font type.

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Not really an error per se, but people don't generally say "How are you, older Sister?" in English, so most translators just leave that as "How are you, Onee-chan?"
All those mentions of older/elder/big sister when speaking directly to her (ie "My big sister is forgetful" is fine, but "Big Sister, did you forget something?" isn't) would be better kept as Onee-chan to look less weird

Beyond that, many thanks for the translation!

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Is that AI decensoring I see?

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Don't use Manga Temple. What an awful suggestion.

Wild Words, CCVictorySpeech, Spinner Rack BB, Richard Starkings are all good catch-all starter fonts.

More general advice: translation isn't something a beginner should attempt, especially since it's obvious English isn't your first language either.

Also, read all of this:

General: https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/
Typesetting: https://web.archive.org/web/20190406011154/https://fallensyndicate.wordpress.com/typesetting-tutorial/
Redrawing: https://web.archive.org/web/20150421210157/http://www.redhawkscans.com/showthread.php?7057-Rain-s-Redraw-Tutorials
Basic cleaning: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PANrCwHy630

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It's good to hear that the author is working on a sequel.

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Carn is my favorite author so i have to say thanks for the translation.

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03: just transferred here recently
- redundant => just transferred here / transferred here (just) recently
03/14: alot => a lot
03: awefully => awfully
04: theres => there's
04/38: eventhough => even though
04/29: dont => don't
10: whats => what's
12: amazing this tea is
- distinct clauses => amazing! This tea is
13: connot => cannot
14: to thick => too thick
14: too much clothes
- numerable => too many clothes
14: its a little embarrassing
- auxiliary => it's a little embarrassing
15: my bigger sisters
- incoherent: she has only one (known) sister => my bigger sister
- possessive? => my bigger sister's
16/19: thats => that's
16: aswell => as well
19: lets advance
- idiom here => let's advance
19: power
- rather? => strength
22: to nice => too nice
25: lets loosen
- idiom here => let's loosen
25: uncles shape
- possessive => uncle's shape
28: its hot
- verb => it's hot
31: its a good opportunity
- verb => it's a good opportunity
32: treat treat => treat
33: youve => you've
36: haven been => have been
36: i'm just going to sleep
- incoherent: wrong person => she's just going to sleep
38: mono
- nonsense
38: do this your engaged boyfriend
- missing preposition => do this to your engaged boyfriend / do this with your engaged boyfriend
38: you're inverted nipples
- possessive => your inverted nipples

And so on...
Also, many bad capitalization.

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Thanks for all the feedback.

Cutegyaru: Wow really appreciate all these links. Already read through some of it and that is really thorough! :)
I've seen your work and you've clearly put much effort into yours. I respect that.

Pokkopokko15: that makes sense. I will take note of that.

orasmase: Wow so many errors :0.
Thanks for this thorough correction! You were mentioning "so on". Did you actually finish?
I would like to incorporate fixing these mistakes in a Version 2 with better typesetting. :)

Page 36: "I'm just going to sleep" - from my understanding nagisa was mumbling this hypnotized. Did I get that wrong?

I will try to find mistakes too.

Regarding the uncensoring.
Would you prefer to have a separate version? Is it to intrusive?
I'm split.. especially the female genitals have very intrusive censoring.

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@kocy
As you guessed, i didn't bother to finish reading.

You may have noticed i'm only pointing out English mistakes -- see how Japanese translation fix suggestions are listed in other galleries. So, as far as incoherence goes, and i do know i can likely be wrong there, i can only point out what i think is incoherent with the context.
So for instance, regarding page 36: considering the whole dialogue and the drawings, it rather seems Nagisa just drops asleep thanks to the hypnosis; thus, the dialogue may more likely come from the uncle. But as i said, someone else able to read Japanese may very well prove me wrong here.

Since you're gladly open to translation feedback, you may want to include the link to the original in the main comment. This way, experienced translators won't have to spend time looking for it, making it easier for them to compare and provide you that feedback. In this case, the raw is there: https://e-hentai.org/g/2640449/179f187b10/
If you want to exchange with them on the details, you might want to do so in the forum, so as not to clutter the gallery comments: https://forums.e-hentai.org/index.php?showforum=81

Good luck.

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