Not too bad for your first upload, aye!

A few of the more obvious stuff to work on is the typesetting with everything being left aligned, the font being a bit generic and boring, and a lack of cleaning on the hand drawn bubbles that actually have dialogue in them. I can see you've put text next to most of the stuff you haven't redrawn, but it'd be better for you to work on trying to clean those up and putting some actual text in the bubbles instead.

The translations pretty solid, aside from one or two things, like on page 5 where you've got her saying "But I'm a man", when she actually says something more along the lines of, "But I'm already an old man...", and a few places where things are just a bit stiff, but obviously those are all things that're gonna happen when you first start out.

I'd suggest you check these out for some general scanlation information:

General resources: https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/
Typesetting: https://web.archive.org/web/20190406011154/https://fallensyndicate.wordpress.com/typesetting-tutorial/
Redrawing: https://web.archive.org/web/20150421210157/http://www.redhawkscans.com/showthread.php?7057-Rain-s-Redraw-Tutorials
Basic cleaning: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PANrCwHy630

Still, always happy to see more futa stuff getting tl'd, we need more brothers like you on the scene. Good luck and I look forward to seeing more of your translations!

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Another note:
Her name is actually read as Tsumugu (つむぐ); the reading is right there on the raw to the right of the kanji.
The author has another illustration of her with the reading as well: https://twitter.com/nattuiyone/status/1404786376319541253

Last edited on 03 January 2023, 12:34.

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Well, it's always great to see someone new trying to translate stuff. Hopefully that the trend will continue

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(Re-uploaded)

For those who are wondering, the guy does not have a name. “〇〇” is a placeholder.

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