Translation from original
raw https://e-hentai.org/g/2741986/edea15be9e/

my first solo cleaning and translation. Let me know if you see any mistakes, errors, or places I screwed up on.

v4 Reworked font, sfx, and formatting.

bros before hoes

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Well, for one thing the font choice and bubble cleaning needs fixing. Usually CC wild words or other similar fonts are the go-to, and just shoving a white background in your text box instead of properly cleaning and blending the bubbles is always very noticeable and sloppy-looking.

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As someone who isn't a translator, but has been on this site for a while, I'd say the readability of the translation needs work, but isn't terrible. You'll get better with practice. I agree that the typesetting/font needs work as well, but as a first attempt it's not awful. Frankly, the quality of the source files isn't great, but that's not your fault.

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I appreciate that you're (probably) not using AI, unlike the other fucking retards roaming around this site, but I have to say that you really need to learn more about editing and typesetting. Use other people's work as your reference and you'll have much better understanding of which font are most fit to use in certain situations. Cutegyaru usually have the links that are very useful for a beginner, hopefully he'd show up here. I understand that everyone's gotta start from somewhere but you'll get better in no time if you keep practicing. Good luck.

Last edited on 26 November 2023, 01:03.

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man make the better woman....

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this would be better if not for the bad typesetting

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Take a look at the basic editing guides https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/ here that can help you improve upon your work. And https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1hPV4o8fmxY2Ab9tXi84l0vVOUQEgFIbU?usp=drive_link here is a wide variety of fonts that you can use in your editing, saving you the trouble of looking for them yourself.
It would be best if you can re-do this current translation to a better standard before attempting to hurry onto the next one - you can edit your galleries and such practice is always appreciated.

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Please study at least one of these guides before you continue posting:

https://mangadex.org/title/08e1f85a-bb12-4fe4-aec5-0d7a80b3a261/anonblack-s-typesetting-guide?tab=chapters
https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/
https://www.ruinevil.com/rawr/editguide/index.html
https://www.insidescanlation.com/etc/the-idiots-guide-to-editing-manga/guide/main

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Apparently the original message was insulting, so let's do it one more time:

First of all, you should make sure that words are not separated by the next line. Hyphenation should be avoided if possible. If this is not possible, you should always separate words by syllable. Then also use a hyphen "-" to indicate that the word continues in the next line.

Try not to get too close to the boundaries of the speech bubble if you are not using an outline.

Furthermore, if a word, or the whole sentence, does not fit into the speech bubble, feel free to break out of it. But then remember that you need a white outline around the words.

Last edited on 28 November 2023, 15:01.

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...something feels odd, like parts of this are made by AI

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Well if you're just here to insulte, you could do the traduction yourselves. Some critics are Real criticism here, and have good intentions and councels, but most com' are just here to bé mean to a guy who'se tried translating for the first time and without using a AI.

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Why are the raws so crunchy? Like they scanned this with a fax machine.

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another work without an ugly old man that turns out to be incognito yaoi...
i should put these foolish ambitions to rest and stay away from those tags

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The type setting isn’t even that bad wtf you all on about

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