Original story written with no knowledge of Japanese.

If you thought it was silly, that's because it was supposed to be. Just laugh and enjoy it.

EDIT: Hey guess what, I made a prequel after 5 years! https://e-hentai.org/g/871349/f5078b2234/

EDIT 2: Looking for the SEQUEL? No? Well here you go anyway: https://e-hentai.org/g/1807364/3aacb296d1/

Yay, more rewrites. Let's see, what do we have here... unimaginative? Check. Comic Sans? Check. Unfunny? Check. Crappy dialogue? Check. Only thing different from most other rewrites (read 95%+) is a somewhat decent grasp of grammar and spelling. No incest is always a plus.

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Ummmmmm, pages 4-7 was probably the only good parts, everything else was just plain silly.

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Pretty amusing, actually.

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@Nashrakh: Your comment made my day :D

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This has to be the goofiest comic I've read in this lifetime.

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Might not have been a legit translation, but it was still pretty funny, and fappable to boot.

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i think the real difference is most rewriters(olddog) legit think their story is really good and is a masterpiece. this one though, is an obvious parody and a joke translation. meaning it's fun to read cause it's not about annie and marie and how the tentacles were made by their incest feelings or some weird shit.

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Ah, I remember when I used to be a humourless cunt like that Nashrahk guy. Then I took the stick out of my ass and learned how to enjoy life :D

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I unironically like this 'story'. It's nice to have some enthusiasm and willingness!
The designs I could do without...

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