01: links fur - possessive => Link's fur 06: your alway => you're always 07: you're pubic hair smell => your pubic hair smells 08: your still holding - auxiliary => you're still holding 10: i can fell it your gonna! => I can feel it, you're gonna...! 11: your still pretty hard - auxiliary => you're still pretty hard 12: the sound off => the sound of 13: i mite die => i might die
And overall lack of punctuation and capitalization.