[Uchuusen Shoujigou (Shouji Nigou)] Otonari no Darashina Onee-san ni Nagusamerareru Hanashi 2 | Comforted by the Sloppy Girl Next Door 2 [English] [Horai]

dumbcow420: serious question, dude: assuming you're the one who translated this, is English not your primary language? If not, you'd be better served translating into the language(s) you (and your group, assuming Horai is more than one person) DO know; otherwise, the final product is gonna come off as rough.

Posted on 19 March 2024, 14:18 by: dumbcow420

Horai here, sorry for poor translation, will do better. also, for Coffedrug, sorry for copying your cover. was doing it on a jiffy and did it by haste, my sincerest apologies and wont do it again.

Posted on 19 March 2024, 18:52 by: Coffedrug

what kind of excuse is that? "I was in a hurry so I copied your cover"
Whatever, dude

Posted on 22 March 2024, 09:14 by: rsx205

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OG: あっ…
TL: "Kasumi-san"
ED: this is just a grunt but her name isn't even Kasumi. you and the previous translator got this wrong throughout

OG: そもそもそういう事自体好きじゃない…とか…
TL: "I don't even like to do it in the first place."
ED: do what...?

OG: ムリヤリ俺の性欲に
TL: "I'm just trying to get my rocks off."
ED: made up translation, he's not talking about his sex drive

OG: 付き合わせてるだけ…だったり…？
TL: "Are you making me go out with you or...?"
ED: made up translation, he's not talking about dating

009
OG: 城戸くんしかいないんだよ
TL: "Only you kiddo"
ED: his name is Kido

010
OG: 俺が出れば回るからって他店からヘルプを呼ぶつもりもなさそうだし…
TL: "It doesn't look like they're going to call in help from other restaurants, just because I'm going to be there..."
ED: he's not talking about what's gonna happen when he's there

011
OG: 城戸くん提供遅れてる！！
TL: "Kiddo, you're late!!"
ED: his name is Kido and he's specific about what's late

OG: いらっしゃいませー
TL: "Hurry up!"
ED: completely made up line, he's welcoming customers

OG: 水が魚を喰ってる…！！
TL: "The fish is in the water, it has been catched[sic]!"
ED: made up translation, the fish is not being "catched"

OG: 一時間分のデータとんだ！？
TL: "Where's all my data?! All hours worths gone"
ED: the amount of time is specified

012
OG: だいぶやつれてきてるよ…大丈夫？
TL: "You look a little pale...are you okay?"
ED: more than a little

013
OG: がんばるぞ～…
TL: N/A

014
OG: 聞いて下さいよ〜今日閉店間際にどっと４グループが〜
TL: "Listen, at the end, I've finished working for 4 different people"
ED: completely made up translation, he's very specific about the story he's telling

018
OG: 休ませてあげたかったけど
TL: "I could've given you more time"
ED: she's a little more specific here than just "time"

020
OG: 息が止まるかと思いましたよ
TL: "I couldn't catch a breath"
ED: he's talking about his thoughts not what he couldn't do

OG: だってここ最近 / ずっと出来なくて… / こんなに側にいるのに… / ずっと…我慢してたから
TL: "Because..." / "Lately..." / "I haven't been able to do it for a long time" / "Even though Im[sic] so close to you"
ED: missing an entire bubble's worth of text

OG: こんな身体じゃなかった
TL: "It's been too long"
ED: completely made up, she's not repeating literally what's in the previous panel again

OG: 責任…
TL: "I can't hold it anymore"
ED: completely made up

OG: とって…♡
TL: "C'mon, fuck me up!"
ED: this isn't what she's asking him to do

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language:	english translated
parody:	original
group:	uchuusen shoujigou
artist:	shouji nigou
male:	drunk sole male
female:	beauty mark big breasts blowjob fingering glasses hairy kissing nakadashi sole female sweating x-ray
other:	multi-work series rough grammar rough translation