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the f:transformation tag should not be used for straight up mtf tg

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@Oregano Jones

I think it might have to do with the hair change within the last four pages as the transformation, and maybe the pregnancy.

Honestly, I think the declaration of them being Trans just breaks immersion for me. Good art overall though.

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@KitsuneDragoon25
I thought it was because he turned from a human into an elf along with the sex change?

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@KitsuneDragoon25

Thanks for the comment about the art.

As for the declaration of her being trans, might I suggest that you try to be more creative and imaginative if something like that disrupts your suspension of disbelief?

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@Kim_Rinzley

Unnecessary attempt at a dig, but I'll elucidate on my stance.

In the context of the comic, it was my feelings that the word choice was poor and only really speaks to a segment of the audience when it could have broader appeal just by a simple rewording without losing any of the gravitas innate to the scene. It could have been posed as the character having always felt they were a woman in spirit. It conveys the same meaning as saying they were Trans, but it works better for the setting, which seems to be a fantasy 19th century. While I don't contest that anachronisms are a thing, this being the only one makes it stand out in the grand scheme of the story.

If this were a longer story, it would have been nice to see a longer coming to terms with the transformation for the character in question. As it stands now, the conflict is very slight and is resolved all too quickly, even if the comic was meant to be a short story.

@Senkoau

Yeah, that does seem appropriate.

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@KitsuneDragoon25

While you make a good point about the terminology, that alone being enough to break immersion seems a bit much. This is a story about a transgender woman being made for a modern audience. Generally, the artist incorporates stuff from our time even when making something supposedly set in another time. "Broader appeal" was never a part of this to begin with. If you're not a part of the appeal, stop trying to force yourself into it.

The fact that it's specifically them being transgender that breaks your immersion is generally what makes people suspicious. There's a lot of transphobia on the internet, and outright saying a character is trans is rare enough that too many people continue to spread that transphobia or just say outright slurs. If your immersion breaks on an inherently magical transformation comic because of that, you really ought to reevaluate yourself.

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@KitsuneDragoon25

I've made enough comics that pretentiously dance around the word "trans" with vague word choices like souls, feelings and so on. It bores me to tears to twaddle on for pages about things my readers already know about. Just saying that she's trans cuts out like 90% of the dialogue I've already written like a hundred times for other characters. But if you enjoy vagueries and inefficient story telling because you're too unimaginative to imagine that a fantasy world might just have the concept of transness already socially established, then more power to you.

Either way, it's my setting and my story and I get to decide what's part of its cultural ruleset.

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yeah, the "i'm trans" dialogue here comes off rough.

like, the first part comes with the "ma'am?" way after she should have noticed something is going on..
Which goes immediately into her "we need to talk" while dressed up in super fancy lingerie. .
Then talk talk talk, instead of what would have been a simple, "I wouldn't have dressed up like this for you, if I didn't love this."

kims work always has this oddity to it. fetish and wish fulfillment. writes these wish fulfillment stories, then also posts dressed, lingerie, and nude fetish versions..
which is basically what this comic is doing. have a sit down conversion, normal people would have dressed normally over dinner. but instead also porn at the same time.

so it comes off odd. I think you could have that talk still. just need to address why shes dressed like that first. talk about the feelings after the sex maybe. or possibly after a reveal of feelings, then "are you sure", into 'no really this a long version of my feelings"

Also, "useless plains". I mean, plains like that wouldn't really exist without native grazing species. as depicted also too rocky for orchids, etc. grazing would likely work.

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