Other languages and versions:

Japanese (RAW, Digital): https://e-hentai.org/g/3775511/b72834dedb/ (uploaded by Lineararcher)
Chinese (Translation, Digital): https://e-hentai.org/g/3779727/adef929f8b/ (uploaded by TMDlixin250)

Base +51

P. 8: “Rio” → “you”; “Kanon’s” → “Your”

P. 14: “Madoka” → “Mafuyu” (Madoka belongs to a previous story 😉)

But it’s always a pleasure to have new NR yuri stories! 🥰

Base +6, 10tonbrick +6, Luuuk -6

@Trit'
P.8 is all correct. The characters are saying each other's names as is common in Japanese instead of using a pronoun like "you". They generally don't use 2nd person pronouns. Many translations keep it that way for accuracy and clarity.

Base +7, alphabetagama +8, 10tonbrick -6, Luuuk +6