https://skeb.jp/@kamiyazuzu
https://x.com/kamiyazuzu
https://www.pixiv.net/users/39151
https://kamiyazuzu.fanbox.cc/

JPN RAW:
https://e-hentai.org/g/3755363/ad6c8b2a2f/

Good job once again! Hyphens at the start of the following line rather than the end of the preceding one are slightly confusing but you've improved a lot with crowded bubbles!

A few notes:
★ On page 4, it says "the bullying idiot" but I assume it should be "bullied" since it's about the guy, i.e. the victim?
★ On the same page, rather than "personally cute pet" it should be "personal cute pet".
★ On page 9, "gives me a strange feelings" › "gives me a strange feeling".
★ On page 12, "I'm might be in trouble" › "I might be in trouble".
★ On page 14, though they might look like SFX or moans, you missed 出ッ (I think it's a small tsu but I'm not sure) and イクイクー.
★ You can hyphenate more if it helps you create a more consistent text shape. There's nothing particularly bad in this release, all I'm saying is that you can be more aggressive in pursuing oval shapes because (IME) the brain can follow hyphenation quite easily up to a certain point. You've done a great job on pages 9 and 11, for example.

Again, fantastic job and I'm happy to see you improve.

Base +6