Since this is a rewrite, please state so in the title. You'll avoid wasting other users' time.

Base +9, StringEmUp +7, sigo8 +8, scrappy135 +8, homogenized +10, nolol111 -8

Technically, all translations are rewrites. They are not and cannot be the original story as was written by the author. Therefore, stating that all rewrites are bad is technically incorrect. Those elitists who spurn all rewrites should at least be elite with their understanding of english and note that they are thus spurning all scanlations.

Base +8, Palaxius -6, Unholy_Razor -7, olddog51 +8, StringEmUp -7, sigo8 -8, jokersan4 -8, TheGreyPanther -29, @43883 +34, HYBRID BEING -7

source: https://e-hentai.org/s/cb3c92ce40/67499-15

Base +10