The improper use of " instead of ' is completely annoying and utterly unneeded.

Base +6, firestorm8909 -6, kkdyaprp +6

So, he goes from extremely dark skin, to seemingly tanned skin?

Feel there needed to be more dialogue on why the girls are choosing to go solo (her this chapter, and presumably makoto next chapter), and why the established protection in their thief forms is rendered irrelevant (just a line about how their subconscious desire for him makes them willingly dispel that would be enough)

Base +17, firestorm8909 -6