This is my first translation, I am currently learning japanese so I took this as an exercise.
If there are any major errors, please post a comment.

Thank you for reading.

I can smell this doujin.

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Yaay I've been waiting for ANY english translation of this artists works. Their doujins are so nasty i love it lolzz

Also idk if its just me but why do you put "~" inbetween words? I thought it usually comes after a word like "come~". (examples you used, "co~me's", "do~wn"). I'm pretty sure you dont use it like that unless a Tilde expert can correct me if im wrong.

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@Iwantnames, I am using the tilde character to elongate the pronunciation of a sound, as Japanese people usually use it. For example, "do~wn" would sound like "doown", if I used "down~", it would sound like "downn", which doesn't feel right. Japanese people usually extend the ending of their words to give emphasis (like when they put "ね~" it sounds like "nee"). I tried to bring that pronunciation to the English translation by what sounded better for me.

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