Chapter 8 is here 🖤

This is the chapter I've been most excited to share. Liam and Mai step outside together for the first time, "Mia" starts becoming something of her own, and things between the two of them shift in a way neither of them planned. I don't want to spoil anything else — just go read it.

Free as always — no paywall, no tier, nothing locked.

Also, a genuine thank you, please, keep it coming. Tell me what worked and what didn't 🖤

Chapter 9 is already in the works. See you there!

My patreon: https://www.patreon.com/cw/Danayacomics

I hope my feedback helps. I'm not trying to be rude.

The thing that bothered me the most about your comic is how unrealistically you change the character's hair and how little focus there is on it. It would be interesting to at least have a more detailed description of what was done to his hair, and I also think it would be better to treat his hair more realistically. It makes zero sense for him to go from having a short bob with bangs to suddenly having long hair with long side bangs. Things like that completely break the immersion for me.

Your English is also pretty broken. I don't know if English isn't your first language or if dialogue just isn't your strong suit, but since the story is the main focus, I think it would be worth working on the dialogue more.

Keep making your stories, though. I definitely don't want to discourage you. I'm sure you'll keep improving with every new chapter you make.

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